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Fewer Neutrons

1 am
Stars out; twin bed 
       walked Gemini
close as space ceiling
on her bones —
with scars tight,
blood liquid fine —
crust unmissed,
her twist,
its dark up,
      no shadow, just
holes beneath the sky...


-Note:  If you're trying to understand this, 
            please read about neutron stars.

darkidentityintrospectionlongingnightfree verse

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Alesia Leach

Date: 5/23/2025 5:13:00 PM

This is dense and devastating in the best way--like grief folded into the physics of stars. "No shadow, just holes beneath the sky" is such a chilling line. You’ve turned collapse into poetry, and it’s beautiful.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/21/2024 6:47:00 PM

A space ceiling... how cool is that? I don't know anything about neutron stars. I'll check it out to better understand your poem.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2024 7:59:00 PM

So are you a Gemini, Paige?

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/19/2024 10:48:00 AM

Cool!

Paige Hind
Date: 10/18/2024 8:16:00 PM

It's complicated, but yes, lol.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/17/2024 9:56:00 PM

Pretty amazing, Paige! Science in poetry! Blessings!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/17/2024 2:20:00 PM

Thank you for the note. I was able to read it in a different way. We don’t have to understand everything but can certainly feel it. Blessings, Paige and hugs to a great PS friend!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/17/2024 9:23:00 AM

You must have delved into neutron stars quite well. Great idea.

Silent One

Date: 10/16/2024 10:24:00 AM

Gemini is the best one.. nicely weaved together dear..

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/15/2024 6:36:00 PM

I enjoy this tricky poem of a neutron star. Poems of science entertain and educate. You've done both well.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 10/15/2024 1:34:00 PM

Dear Paige, I love this, and it is funny because when I first saw the title, I thought neurons, and then I read your well-inked poem and said to myself, "no, neutrons". First let me say Wow! so rich in astronomical imagery, blending it with intimate, bodily references. I love how it shows both cosmic and personal elements, creating a sense of both vastness and claustrophobia. I just love the final lines, "no shadow, just / holes beneath the sky," which evoke a sense of emptiness or loss, reflecting the emotional state. Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Ink Empress

Date: 10/15/2024 12:27:00 PM

Dear Paige, You do abstract poetry very well! Love what youv delivered here. Do you see alot of stars from where you are at? I love star gazing and there wss a time i used to use an app to figure names of various stars etc! Love the wordplay here! Pleasure always reading you! Sending you light always

Paige Hind
Date: 10/17/2024 1:45:00 PM

Dear Ink, I see stars sometimes some places...but I love them. It's a comforting feeling when I'm alone. Hope they can comfort you as well -