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This is for the Haiku In The Mirror Poetry Contest sponsored by Matt Caliri.

This is for:The Haiku In The Mirror Poetry Contest sponsored by Matt Caliri.

A Haiku About a Haiku

toriawase – 

split by a caesura

a rose and her scent

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 2/24/2024 6:34:00 AM

This is so clever Paul. As a friend once said to me, "I am in love of it!". hugs :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/28/2024 7:37:00 AM

Thank you for reading and "loving it" Linda. Regards & hugs // paul

Panagiota Romios

Date: 10/16/2023 8:26:00 PM

Congratulations on making one of the top best poems list Paul. May I add you to my personal best humans on planet earth as well? I do not think Haiku is short poetry. It takes expertise in languaging It’s an art form that draws on all of our senses in an Artistic window. Panagiota

Paul Callus
Date: 10/21/2023 2:15:00 AM

Thank you, dear Pangie for your warm, pleasant visit which lights up my day (even though outside the sky is overcast and rain drizzles. Yes, haiku is such a special poetry form! ** Warm regards, my friend. // paul

Gary Radice

Date: 9/24/2023 12:25:00 PM

Never have ten words made me think for so long before. I'm happy to say the time invested was so worth it. This haiku is as brilliant as it is clever. Your choosing and arranging of words in an order that conveys meaning are superb and then there's the pause (-). How can I put this Paul? Your haiku means what it is. :) Cheers - Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 10/8/2023 2:04:00 AM

Thank you for this pleasant feedback, Gary, and pls excuse my late reply...life has been hectic, to say the least! Glad you managed to make heads or tails of my humble offering :) ~ Regards // paul

Harveen Kaur

Date: 9/9/2023 9:02:00 PM

Nice one

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 1:05:00 AM

Thank you, Harveen. Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Susan Lawrence

Date: 9/4/2023 6:45:00 AM

Yes dear friend … I had to look up a few words ! Perfectly expressed without anything added . Poignant as always . Sending best wishes for the contest . Hope you are smiling . Love, Susan :)

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 1:19:00 AM

Thank you dear Susan, and please excuse my late reply; life has been hectic...overflowing ... but I still hold on to sanity with a big smile :) Love & Hugs // paul [been reading some of your past poems while waiting for a new one...]

Jack Horne

Date: 9/4/2023 4:01:00 AM

love this clever one, Paul. Hope all is well for you : )

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 1:29:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by, my friend. (been ultra busy, even though at my age I ought to be slowing down!!) Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/31/2023 5:42:00 AM

Lovely.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 1:50:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. Hope all is alright in your side of the wood! Regards // paul

Bill Baker

Date: 8/28/2023 4:52:00 PM

You have a special gift of writing beautiful and meaningful Haikus, Paul. I agree with the comments below ... You shouldn't need any luck in this contest, my friend. A FAV for my list! Bill

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 3:45:00 AM

Thank you, Bill for the nice comments and faith you showed in this haiku. Unfortunately it failed to make it to the winners' list... your fav already makes it a winner :) ~ Regards // paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/26/2023 11:18:00 AM

I fully agree with Akkina about this gem being exquisite. I think this has to be a winner in that contest. As it is an exquisitely beautiful Haiku! A gleaming jewel and a new fav for my growing list. God bless you.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 3:47:00 AM

Your generous feedback is truly appreciated, Robert, so is the fav! Thank you and best regards, my friend // paul

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/21/2023 7:12:00 PM

An exquisite Haiku, my friend. Hugs~

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2023 3:48:00 AM

Glad you found it to your liking, Akkina ... thank you and warm regards, my friend. // paul

Hiya Sharma

Date: 8/20/2023 9:23:00 AM

Oh, I'm in awe of how eloquently this haiku has been crafted, "toriawase- split by a caesura" Such a breathtaking and profound flow, with beautiful imagery.. "A rose and her scent" That's so gorgeous! Love this! Hued with delicate and elegant poetic richness..

Paul Callus
Date: 8/26/2023 2:19:00 PM

Thank you Hiya. Your delightful reaction to my humble poem is much appreciated. It is a pleasure to make your acquaintance. ~ Regards // paul

Ink Empress

Date: 8/20/2023 7:06:00 AM

I love the way you’ve written for this contest, i wrote one too, and i am not sure if i followed rules as i am new. But your haiku is so profound and well crafted i especially love “ a rose and her scent “ so good!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/11/2023 2:52:00 AM

Thank you for your pleasant visit and lovely comments, Empress. Enjoy the week ahead // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/19/2023 2:12:00 PM

Very cool, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 9/11/2023 2:53:00 AM

Thank you Kim. Have a lovely day :) // paul

Tom Woody

Date: 8/19/2023 6:30:00 AM

You always were a master of short poetry Paul. So glad you're still contributing. Have a great weekend

Paul Callus
Date: 9/11/2023 7:02:00 AM

Thank you, Tommy. I do my best to cope with many loose ends! I need more hours in a day! Regards // paul

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/18/2023 4:21:00 PM

The deepest haiku core, which emerges from the delicate process of toriawase and the strategic use of caesura, stands out as a favorite due to its unparalleled originality and inherent beauty.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/11/2023 6:02:00 AM

Your insightful comments are truly appreciated, Lassad...thank you, and enjoy the week ahead // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 8/18/2023 2:05:00 PM

this is SO clever Paul I had a bit of googling to do for certain words! hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 8/18/2023 2:40:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. It was my intension for readers to get acquainted with the words 'toriawase' and 'caesura', both being important in haiku writing. Regards & Hugs // paul