You're on my mind

Written: June 5th, 2024, For Jay Narain Contest

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Your smile awestruck me every morning,
Truly ambrosian and quiddity display style.
Your ariose image is rife in my dreams,
As optimism rises, I wake up with beams.

You could be the one, I didn't love enough,
There was a juncture in, I treated you rough.
Girl, if I beshrew you feel odious, I was blind,
If I crestfallen you, you're often on my mind.

You induce me to dare my worries and fears,
I will support you in your anguish and tears.
All I sense for you is beyond what I may show,
You are precious to me; I wish that you know.

I didn't descry you those lonesome times,
It is a delight to have you; you are sublime.
My thoughts of you hampered my tries to rest,
The warmth of your kindness swells my chest.

Whatever transpires, I will be devout to you,
My briny goal is always you, and I will pursue.
Allow me to win your quintessence one final time,
I often relate to you; I've never had time to dime.

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Crystol Woods

June 9, 2024 at 4:12 PM

Awe... beauty. Words that move and touch hearts. Greatly deserved kudos! Xo

Diane Christian

June 9, 2024 at 3:39 AM

My mam used to always tell us never be scared to say how you feel. People are not mind readers she said. Thry dont know how you feel unless you tell them A well written poem. My friend did this to me never showed their feelings until it was to late. They now ring daily just to say I was thinking of you but after 9 years of the cold shoulder I can only remain friends. I remember saying don't be like a deep freezerso cold I would get more warmth from there.

Tonye George

June 8, 2024 at 9:15 AM

Feelings this intense should be told. Someone once told me " i think of you everyday." I couldn't help but think it a lie. How do you care about someone so much and you do not reach out or tell them, even if it hurts. I think it's a selfish thing to do. "You are precious to me; I wish that you know." How would they know? I'm trying to live life without regrets, take risks and be responsible for every decision. I'm trying not to fall in love but I know that's something I have no control over.

Karen Jones

June 7, 2024 at 5:28 AM

My favorite line “The warmth of your kindness swells in my chest”. This is a romantic and beautiful poem Sotto! Love it!

Evelyn Judy Buehler

June 6, 2024 at 11:23 PM

Sotto, your heartfelt poem is quite well composed and enjoyable. Its beautiful words are accompanied very nicely by the haunting melody. Best wishes.

Hilda Greenhough

June 6, 2024 at 4:16 PM

This appears to be a gentle poem of regret. I enjoyed the fascinating story. Good luck with the contest.

Sara Kendrick

June 6, 2024 at 1:22 PM

Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Keep on writing. Sara K

Duke Beaufort

June 6, 2024 at 9:39 AM

SP, this is an interesting reflective poem on feelings of love and attachment. I often wonder how is it we take love for granted. It's an inspiration that we should act on and not delay. Of course, we hope the other person will be receptive. Hard to believe that sometimes, we could be so occupied with something that we don't take the trouble to respond to people. I was just thinking that this could apply to apologies as well for any wrong or rudeness we propagated. That could sometimes be on our minds too.