Your War

Bloodied and battleworn I called for a steed that could run Instead of a horse You brought me a gun A comrade in the trench Not an invitation to a ball I've run out of ammo But it is'nt my war You angered the enemy He thinks it was me You gave without asking Now the problem is yours

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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 8/27/2017 9:03:00 AM

I believe war is the creation of old men to shore up wanning manhood. I am happy you wrote these words so easy for everyone to understand There can be no hiding behind a plea of ignorance of content. Jannie I hope people who read this piece don't just see it but digest the words make them part of blood and bone.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/4/2018 3:41:00 PM

Like I said earlier . You are so wickedly spot on with your comments. Cant they guess whats going on ? I mean .. really

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/28/2017 7:01:00 AM

Good Morning Jannie. Allow me to say this is explosive expressive powerful and more. What can be said for this message and for the ending words alone, everything. Honestly. I'm so glad I turned to you work and your page this morning. You are obviously skilled at this craft we call poetry. I very much enjoyed your theme here. Well done throughout.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 3/28/2017 12:05:00 PM

Hi Lisa, Im really a bit of a nutter but I love what you say. Thank you so much

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/14/2017 9:06:00 PM

I love the message of this one, Jannie. SO TRUE. Like Caycay says, Thought-provoking!!

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/15/2017 10:17:00 PM

Hi Andrea you are my special angel. You came stealing in . Your comment didnt even beep my phone

Caycay Jennings

Date: 1/14/2017 2:53:00 PM

I am applauding this - really, can you hear me? Excellent. Love the depth, the incredible depth delivered so succinctly. This is the most thought provoking poem I may have ever read on Soup. A Wow .. 7 and --- more applause! CayCay

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/14/2017 3:52:00 PM

Oh Cay Cay what can I say.? You are wonderful . Thank you xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/10/2017 9:00:00 PM

As long as egos reign there will be wars, sadly.well penned Jannie. I hope this new year brings you much happiness! : )

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/14/2017 3:48:00 PM

Hi Connie, ty for your visit and lovely wishes and I know you meant every word . I hope things are also peachy for you up in Hawaii

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/7/2017 12:33:00 AM

Indeed! The acrid bite of truth here ... wonderfully woven and well-said, Jannie ... The only wisdom in war is regret ...

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/7/2017 1:41:00 AM

I unfortunately dont know the formula to stop it. Thanks for your apt comment

John Fleming

Date: 1/6/2017 9:26:00 AM

For a short poem very thought provoking. Nicely done...I rather enjoyed this. All the best, Jannie. :) john

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/6/2017 11:01:00 AM

Hey John nice of you Thanks

Robert Lindley

Date: 1/5/2017 9:06:00 PM

War is pure hell, lets not join in next time. Instead lets dance and sing, get drunk and be happy.. And if not that, then lets all go fishing!! You nailed it-- bloodied and battle-worn is noway to be!!

Jannie Breedt
Date: 1/6/2017 11:04:00 AM

Hi Robert, yes I agree but in this case it refers to a partner but as they say - All is fair in love and war