Brooke Dylan Poet Quatrain

Your Eyes

So clear I can see
eyes so pure, to me
holds my destiny ...

Twice I looked
there you were
but this is the day
you left me alone...

Seeing your heart
maybe they were bones
sweet and bitterness loneliness
coming close to the whirling beam
of light, molten to the freeze of anger
you altered all the grace I had, I guess I 
inherited this great hurt alone...

Brooke

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Donna Jones May 9, 2014 at 8:51 PM Very well done emotional write Brooke...liked it very much.. Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 8:52 PM Thank you Donna... nice to see you

Dr.Ram Mehta May 9, 2014 at 10:19 AM Enjoyed the expression on longing, Brooke Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 4:15 PM Thank you Dr.Ram

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 9, 2014 at 8:37 AM oh....... truly one needs a lot of practice to hide something when it comes to the eyes.. great write.. :), olive eloisa GBU.. :) Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 9:43 AM thank you Dear Olive

Monterey Sirak May 9, 2014 at 8:21 AM Powerful emotion! It seems like we can share happiness, but when we hurt, we hurt alone. Well done. Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 9:44 AM Thank you Monterey.. hugs girlfriend

Kim Van Breda May 9, 2014 at 7:30 AM Awesome write Brooke-- wonderful emotional expression. Xx~Xx Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 7:33 AM Thank you Kim... hugs

Paul Callus May 9, 2014 at 6:35 AM Very heartfelt and strongly expressed; keep up with the sterling work! // paul Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 6:56 AM Paul thank you so much..'hugs Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 6:55 AM PAU THANK YOU so much... you are so nice... hugs Brooke

Poet Tacito May 9, 2014 at 1:58 AM Life will always gift us with things we need/want and things we'd rather do without. No return policies on this. The best thing we could do, shine on through it all. This hit so hard. Excellent poem! Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 6:49 AM DRAKE thank you.. you are so nice.... I am so honored ...thank you for visiting and commenting Brooke

Mel Merrill May 9, 2014 at 12:32 AM Hi Brooke. I see you're the new best poet. Cool. I held that spot for as long as they allow. I luv your poems--no wonder you hold the "best new" honors...xxx...Mel Brooke Dylan May 9, 2014 at 6:41 AM WOW thank you Mel.. I am so honored to have you visit and comment.. hugs xxx..Brooke

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen May 8, 2014 at 9:54 PM A good sight in the eyes. Brooke Dylan May 8, 2014 at 10:05 PM thank you so much...

Robert Lindley May 8, 2014 at 9:39 PM Great write. Sad but loaded with depth and insight.... I just presented my write, titled - "About ,Those Angel Eyes" However it was a glory not sad at all. Robert Lindley May 8, 2014 at 10:36 PM Thanks for your comment on my offering. Yes there actually was sadness in my write but it pales when compared to the glory of having had the chance to meet and know her! I like so many young men made a tragic mistake and paid the price for it.. Brooke Dylan May 8, 2014 at 9:41 PM Thank-you Robert.. I will check it out.. hugs