Your Disfigured Ode

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5/12/2025 for The Duality of Motherhood Poetry Contest sponsored by Suzette Richards

mother here no longer but forever judged you were everything the self-sacrificing source of all love and comfort and all rage and rejection you made me and i am somehow part of you and i was your mirror showing what you did not want to see weakness, neediness the object of your shame and self-loathing now (just like me) instead of producing a bouquet of roses I disfigure this ode to motherhood

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Crystol Woods

Date: 5/18/2025 5:19:00 AM

You have allowed yourself to be vulnerable here... thank you for sharing this with us! Poetry connects humanity through relatable experiences, emotion, and reaction. It's a beautiful craft that let's us truly see ourselves in our fellowman, gaining empathy and compassion. You are so brave! That paid off because you've created a poem so tender and raw, it aches inside of my heart. Xoxo

David Crandall
Date: 5/18/2025 10:49:00 AM

Thanks Crystol, I appreciate your comments!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/15/2025 11:04:00 AM

I love writing this way, to see the truth. Yes, we will all right that beautiful, sweet, that bouquet, but it is seeing between the lines that we find ourselves. Hugs and congrats!

David Crandall
Date: 5/16/2025 8:49:00 AM

Thanks Kim, I really appreciate your comment!