You Think I’m Dreaming

I felt the sea on my pulse,
the salt in my brunette,
pebbles underfoot,
the net dragging me.

I felt the familiar ebb and flow,
close to shore,
tippy-toes.

The coconut permeates the dawn,
its scent infiltrating,
its oils reverberating.

I feel the palms bending low,
so low I can touch
their feather fronds;
and fronts clashing.

First drops of the storm,
so tender-pitter-patter,
light thunder,
soft lightning.

Nearby volcano erupting,
you think I’m dreaming
about your lava eyes.

Beach blanket soaked,
settling into muddy sand,
its tartan, tanned
and connecting
with the waves,
overlapping.

The island’s going under -
the  thunder, ecstatic;
its lightning erratic.

Surrounded by water,
a dugout
with flapping wings -
the canoe is land.

Lily pads on steroids
float upon deceptive waters -
so pretty I can touch them;
and caiman too.

All that’s ever been
resides in sandy eyes;
I’ve collected seashells
in my mind.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Hind Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 4:20 PM
Haunting stuff, Kim - " I feel the palms bending low, so low I can touch their feather fronds; and fronts clashing. "...just breathtaking, love that ending, too..."seashells in my mind" <3
Rodrigues Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 4:45 PM
Thank you, Paige! The angst pulls you in and the seashells :)
Rodrigues Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 4:42 PM
Thank you, Paige! The angst pulls you in and the seashells :)
Buhagiar Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 12:14 PM
Your imagery is excellent and varied. Great poem.
Rodrigues Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 4:41 PM
Thank you! I appreciate your encouraging comment! Hugs ~ Kim
Nyaga Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 12:12 PM
You visualize and write so vividly, it's almost tangible.. and awakening to the senses.. A well penned piece.. //Blessings
Rodrigues Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 4:40 PM
Thank you, Lewis!
Gasun Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 1:51 AM
Captivating write my dear poet friend Kim! Your poem led me in that magical place. Thanks for sharing. Thanks for your visit on my pages too. Have a wonderful wkend/new wk ahead. God bless! Hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 4:40 PM
Thank you and God bless ~ Kim
Sands Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 5:21 PM
Wow, this poem is amazing! Excellent descriptions and full of life. I am grateful to be led to this today. A Fave :)
Rodrigues Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 9:16 PM
So glad you like! Thank you for the fave! Hugs ~ Kim
Crandall Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 3:42 PM
wonderful island dream you cooked up!
Rodrigues Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 5:02 PM
Thank you, David :)
Buehler Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 2:45 PM
Your poem took me to a place exotic and lovely, Kim. The imagery is just gorgeous! It's impossible to pick a favorite line-I love them all. This poem is a fave. :)
Rodrigues Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 5:01 PM
Thank you kindly, dear Evelyn! <3
Velasco Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 1:02 AM
I really like how this poem makes you feel like you’re right there by the sea. The smells, the sounds, even the storm coming—it all feels so real. The ending is nice too, like you’re holding onto those little memories. Super vivid and easy to get lost in.
Rodrigues Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 5:19 AM
Thank you, dear one! So glad you like this one! :)
Etgen-Baker Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 4:25 PM
Appreciate the descriptive words and lines of your poem....engaging from beginning to end. Now I want to visit Galveston Beach :-) hugs, Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 6:43 PM
You made me smile, dear Sara! Hugs
DiMino Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 3:08 PM
Lovely journey, Kim; very descriptive and captivating. Was going to watch "Mysterious Island", this evening, but this is better. Well done!
Rodrigues Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 6:43 PM
So glad you liked it, my friend! :)
Wolf Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 2:31 PM
Wow! This would make one heck of a movie, methinks. What vision you have, Kim. I feel as if I've witnessed an explosion just reading this poem. ~ The Eyes Have It
Rodrigues Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 6:44 PM
You made my day! Thank you, Gershon!
Goldsmith Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 1:01 PM
I enjoyed reading your "You Think I’m Dreaming" write. Great story... Now I am dreaming of a sandy beach with seashells. "Good Luck" if for a contest. Have a blessed/wonderful day writing away.............
Rodrigues Avatar
August 8, 2025 at 6:45 PM
So glad you are now dreaming… Hugs and thank you, Paula!
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