You Had Her At Achoo

Did they say it round the tree?
Was it the initial-peek-a-boo?
Was it said with diamond-degree
or with rhinovirus achoo?

Was this thing called love catching?
His youthful looks and ruthless-hanky
and her wavy brunette sway fetching
before love sickness got too -panky.

A linen cloth could have harbored
the germs from which no antitoxin.
She’s amused by whistling on starboard
and forthright first-sight-neurotoxin.

Later, they stare into empty space.
She used her ring for scribbling.
Gin was her tonic, a cold head case.
His knuckles, not her ears, nibbling.

An unlikely spark brought them back.
They wrapped arms around the oak.
Surprised by touching fingertips, smack
of lips that mollified disparaging gin-soak.

His debonair looks and ruthless-hanky.
Her wavy snow-white sway, fetching.
Battling love sickness with its -panky
Forever-after-lips relentlessly catching.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Dietrich Avatar
October 4, 2025 at 1:44 AM
Fun whimsical poems, Kim. Catchy title.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 4, 2025 at 5:22 AM
A little humor there? Thank you, my friend!
Hind Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 7:34 PM
Ah, youth.... I remember; this poem is lighthearted, yet the truth is true all the same,
Rodrigues Avatar
October 4, 2025 at 5:22 AM
Right..youth…I remember too…lol
Etgen-Baker Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 5:22 PM
enjoyed this poem about young love--enthralling. You nailed it with the last verse
Rodrigues Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 6:04 PM
Glad you liked that :)
Kitchin Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 3:52 PM
Kim, a great poem, life can challenge and change young love. I enjoyed their journey and with a great ending.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 6:04 PM
Thank you so much!
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