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Wrinkled Rose

The moon is a wrinkled rose, quenched in quartz tears,
and I taste the citrus scent of russet rain~
from the heart of his crown, embroidered with fears,
while stars weave wishes across the astral plane.
But what if sage streaks of lunar-dusted spheres,
wrap my warm soul with twinkling trinkets in vain?
Would I then find constellations of fireflies,
be the true maiden to gothic ruffled skies?  

Copyright © Ink Empress | Year Posted 2024

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Kim Rodrigues Date: 11/8/2024 7:46:00 AM ruffled skies and firefly constellations…lovely write! Login to Reply

Tonye George Date: 6/22/2024 6:00:00 PM A great opening. I love the metaphors all the time. "while stars weave wishes across the astral plane." I love this line and I do believe the stars do something about wishes, however, when it rains, I doubt it lets the wishes get back healthy. Great work Dear Ink. Login to Reply

Unseeking Seeker Date: 6/14/2024 7:29:00 PM My, my! What a bewitchingly enchanting write, IE. A fav for me. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/15/2024 7:05:00 AM Dear seeker it always means alot hearing from you, thank you so very much for the fave too and visit. Appreciate your kindness

Constance La France Date: 6/14/2024 4:00:00 PM Ink, your poem is so beautiful, well done and best of luck in the contest. I have all of Emile's books and each one is wonderful, hugs Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/15/2024 7:08:00 AM Awwn dear constance thank you so very much im grateful for your kindness and support truly

Nette Onclaud Date: 6/13/2024 10:53:00 PM Your reflections mirror the wisdom of your words...finely addressed, Ink...best luck in the contest! Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/15/2024 7:11:00 AM Awwn dear nette so very kind and generous of you, thank you so very much truly

Duke Beaufort Date: 6/13/2024 2:54:00 PM IE, I always look for meaning in poetry and I'm thinking that this poem is about doubt as the poem sets up a bit of discomfort in one's belief. The initial doubt leads to more..."Wrap my warm soul in vain?" and "Would I then find constellations of fireflies,...?" This is so very subtle, yet very much thought provoking, which I really enjoy. OMG, all of a sudden I am smiling internally. I shan't mention this again, but since poetry soup is not an app but a website, you should be able to put your phone in landscape presentation and add a video link. It's a nice feature. Finally, your poetry is wonderful, and I am just so thrilled that we are able to appreciate it all with or without anything added!!! Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/15/2024 7:15:00 AM Ah dear duke, my words do make many think alot when trying to perceive but i use symbolism, and its i think a way of thinking and you somehow do manage to grasp the essence of my poems and you do it so sincerely thank you so very much for that

Sam Kauffman Date: 6/13/2024 12:23:00 PM Dearest Inky, once again I sit here caught in the spell of your poetic rainbow and your words woven into a spellbinding moonlit night of the soul. Just so beautiful, dear friend. And, so inspiring! Your gift for molding images into striking verses is stellar. Best wishes for the contest, sweet poet. Hope you are feeling better! Sending prayers and hugs dear friend. Samzy Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/15/2024 7:21:00 AM Awn thnk you samszy appreciate your kindness truly

Hilda Greenhough Date: 6/13/2024 10:35:00 AM I like how you created this poem. Ottawa Rima can be challenging but you produced a beautiful poem. As an aside, there does seem to be something Gothic about fireflies. Perhaps it's the metallic looking tube's on their back legs. A nice description. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 4:03:00 AM Awn thank you so much dear hilda always for your kindness

Victor Buhagiar Date: 6/13/2024 2:01:00 AM This poem combines great reflections, with added imagery and great sensitivity of emotions. A premium contest entry that deserves a high placement. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 6:48:00 AM Ah thank you so very much dear victor how very kind of you

Sotto Poet Date: 6/12/2024 6:26:00 PM Dear Ink, your magnificent poetry, with its contemplation of heavenly and natural subjects, considers the relationship between outward beauty and inner fulfillment. Impressive sensory imagery and deep emotional and intellectual contemplation are skillfully brought together in this Ottava Rima poem. Your use of synesthesia and metaphor brings the story to life, drawing the reader in, and the opportunities for reflection encourage them to consider their journey for purpose and identity. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 6:52:00 AM Thank you so very much dr sotto i appreciate your kindness always

Paige Hind Date: 6/12/2024 6:11:00 PM I am sure something somewhere would find you- a beautiful poem, dear Ink Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 7:01:00 AM Awwn sweet paige thank you so very much

Sara Kendrick Date: 6/12/2024 2:28:00 PM Creative contest entry. Thanks for sharing this one with us. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Your visit to my page was uplifting. Sara K Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 7:25:00 AM Thank you sara k

Silent One Date: 6/12/2024 1:14:00 PM Your Ottava Rima masterfully combines rich, sensory imagery with profound emotional and philosophical reflections. Through its exploration of natural and celestial themes, it contemplates the interplay between external beauty and internal fulfilment. Your use of metaphor and synesthesia creates a vivid, immersive experience, while the reflective questions invite readers to ponder their own search for meaning and belonging. Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 7:41:00 AM Awwn thank you silent one always appreciate your kindness and support…

Joseph May Date: 6/12/2024 6:35:00 AM An enchanting write, I love the flow of this beautiful verse, best wishes Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 7:41:00 AM Thank you so very much dear joseph appreciate your kindness

Tom Woody Date: 6/12/2024 5:45:00 AM Ahhh, to be the moon in your life. To have countless love poems written, to be the center of your life. Your son and significant other are privileged ones indeed. The love you give out and get back will never be in vain dear Ink, at least not where true hearts are concerned Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 7:43:00 AM Awwn thats such a sweet thing to say dear tomsz thank u so very much truly

Daniel Henry Rodgers Date: 6/12/2024 4:41:00 AM Dear Empress, Ok, your poetic imagery is really out of this world! I think I really love the celestial metaphors and all the lush language because it totally captivated me. I was very mesmerized by the "wrinkled rose" moon, "russet rain", and "lunar-dusted spheres" - such a gorgeous, dreamlike atmosphere that left me in this world you created. Empress this is so beautifully crafted using your cosmic artistry! A FAV! - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel Login to Reply Ink Empress Date: 6/17/2024 7:44:00 AM Awwn thank you for the fave and comment truly grateful dear daniel always

The Aura Rhymes Date: 6/12/2024 1:41:00 AM Amazing as always Login to Reply

Lioness Onpaper Date: 6/12/2024 12:34:00 AM Ooo that opening line tho!!!! The moon is a wrinkled rose, quenched in quartz tears, The imagery is mind bending aeee .. taste the citrus scent of russet rain from the heart of his crown, mmmmm love the kind of heaviness this piece brings … what if sage streaks of lunar-dusted spheres, wrap my warm soul with twinkling trinkets in vain? Damn papi… ur imagery is amazing… constellations of fireflies,ayoooo u killing me with this gorgeousnesssss. Absolute perfection ae! ! Login to Reply