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Wreckage-Screwed X Contest

Wreckage-Screwed X Contest

            Believing in you caused wreckage in me
               You thought taking your own life would fix you
                    Now alone, stuck in hell on bended knee
                         Cleaning up your awful mess, residue
                              Didn't you see your beautiful value?
                                   Complicated loss, confusion, grief, fire
                                       What was your reasoning, depth or desire?
                                           Self-destructive and annihilation
                                                Wounded, suffering, physical satire
                                                      Articulation, manipulation

                                                            
                                                                  ~November 18, 2015~
                                                                     Sponsor: Rob Carmack


***Ten lines, ten syllables each line
and rhyme scheme: a. b. a. b. b. c. c. d. c. d.***

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Eve Roper

Date: 12/5/2015 8:24:00 PM

Laura, it seems that you and I have had our sisters on our minds here lately. I'm so sorry for your loss. My sister didn't know it was coming but it all was caused from the long use of drugs. I was only 28 at the time she was 21. :'( Wonderful poem and congratulations on your win!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 12/4/2015 11:17:00 PM

Wonderful poem and win Laura ... big congrats!

Skat A

Date: 12/4/2015 10:13:00 PM

Laura, Congratulations on your sweet win. Enjoyed your entry. LUV SKAT

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 12/4/2015 9:44:00 AM

A vivid description of your loss.

David Meade

Date: 11/18/2015 9:28:00 PM

The loss is poignant and I felt the pain through each work and as the sentences cascaded down! Hugs

Lu Loo
Date: 11/19/2015 11:29:00 AM

Thank you David, I emailed you earlier, and thank you for your kind words and inspirational quote. God Bless :)-lu xx *smiles*

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2015 7:29:00 PM

Sad if this is a true story. I think that was really cool the way you started out the poem. The guy made wreckage of not only his own life but of yours.

Lu Loo
Date: 11/18/2015 7:40:00 PM

Thank you, it's about my sister who took her own life almost 5 years ago. This New Years Eve it will be five years already. I still can't believe it and lately she's really been on my mind..