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March 18, 2024

"Woven Worlds" (Tanka Prose) Premiere Poetry Contest

Sponsor: Suzette Richards

Prose - 58 words (manually), 57 words - word-counter.net

SEVENTH PLACE

A group of students from Japan visiting India - a city so crowded they had never seen! In their blooming minds, everything seems beautiful - loud street-vendors, smell of spicy food, dangers of crossing roads with uncontrolled traffic, walking on uneven cobbled sidewalks ! They will return to a perfect world, with memories and experiences that totally changed their vision! perfect charm unique perceived by fresh young minds in terrible chaos return to tranquillity leave heart quietly bleeding

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 4/6/2024 11:49:00 AM

Lovely image here Mala. The contrast is vividly expressed. Congratulations! :)

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/18/2024 3:45:00 PM

Dear Linda, Thank you so much. Really appreciate your thoughtful and supportive comments.

Suzette Richards

Date: 4/5/2024 1:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in my Woven Worlds – Tanka Prose contest, Malabika. Thank you for your support. Suzette

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/5/2024 6:58:00 AM

Thank you so much, Dear Suzette. Your contests are unique - feel honoured for the placement.

Beata Agustin

Date: 4/5/2024 1:31:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... vividly exposing two worlds... God bless you.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 4/5/2024 6:57:00 AM

Thank you so much, Beata. Congratulations to you, too. Looking forward to reading yours, which are always thoughtful and deep.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/30/2024 9:27:00 AM

Very nice, Mala! My husband was recently in India and tells the tales :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/31/2024 2:43:00 PM

He was there for work (Ibm) in Bangalore. Not sure he likes the crowds and busyness but I think he still had a good time. Brought me back some coffee.

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/30/2024 1:48:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dear Kim. Did your husband go to India on official trip, or just travelling? Did he like the country? It is a bit of chaos there, but people are warm, they have life. From now on, I am planning to go every year, if my health permits.

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/20/2024 5:00:00 PM

Dearest Mala, gifted poetess, it's wonderful how you've woven two very different worlds together in an experience of a lifetime for students visiting India from Japan. Your animated imageries and the emotions created captures the chaos and contrasts it to the "tranquility" the students will soon return to with poetic finesse. Your golden pen brings me to the center of the busy scene with ease. Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/20/2024 5:13:00 PM

Ah, what a wonderful encounter! So glad to see you back, dearest Mala! Your gifted poetic presence has been missed:)

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/20/2024 5:09:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dearest Susan. I am so glad you read this poem - I wanted to try this unusual format and the theme which the title indicates. I was travelling for last two months, and truly encountered a group of Japanese students visiting India to learn the language I grew up with. Love and hugs ~

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/18/2024 4:20:00 PM

experiencing another culture as this students did was a great take on the 'woven worlds' contest. From personal experience from traveling abroad, seeing chaos and fear does weave into one's mind and heart leaving a lasting impression. Wonderful poem; best wishes with the contest, Sara

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 3/18/2024 4:50:00 PM

Dear Sara, Your uplifting comments inspire me so much! I was not very confident about the direction my writing was heading to. You made me smile - you made my day, Sara. Love, hugs and best wishes ~ Mala