Woven Worlds

Buoyant orange flames leap like a leopard stalking the sun. Posthumously, the mountain of smoke and ash collapsing on itself, selfishly stomping out joy, but for the Aurora Borealis, the joykill of skullduggery. Her light like song notes, tra-la-la-ing. Her beauty, unscrupulous, to the roaring volcanic beast.

northern lights emeralds and pinks disclosing phantasm peaks valleys of despair
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Fowler Avatar
April 6, 2024 at 11:45 AM
Fabulous imagery Kim. You weave unpretentious with quiet beauty. Congratulations! :)
Anaya Avatar
April 5, 2024 at 8:14 AM
Pure energy and imagery Kim. A woven world so well created. Prose sung to the tune of the tanka! Congratulations on your win!
Rodrigues Avatar
April 5, 2024 at 7:02 PM
Thank you, Anaya!
Richards Avatar
April 5, 2024 at 1:42 AM
The prose has undercurrents of the dramatic narrative, echoed in the final phase of the tanka. You lifted us up to the heavens in the prose poetry, only to be cast down in the valleys of despair in the final line of the tanka, creating a stark contrast. You successfully wove the two worlds of tanka and prose together in this feast for the eye and emotional experience by employing various figures of speech (e.g. personification, simile, etc) in this tribute to the force of nature. Congratulations on your fourth place win, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 5, 2024 at 7:01 PM
So excited! Thank you, Suzette!
Beaufort Avatar
April 2, 2024 at 3:24 PM
Kim, it's an interesting contrast. The separate phenomena go on...one unaffected by the other. The local portion of our universe contains some amazing things to view and contemplate.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 3, 2024 at 5:23 AM
Love how you said that…an interesting contrast, unaffected by each other. God bless you, Duke!
Ray Choudhury Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 4:09 PM
Dear Kim, you have painted picture of an unusual scene - which many of us just imagine in our mind's eyes! I marvel at your descriptive style and word choices! Love and warm wishes ~
Rodrigues Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 7:17 PM
Thank you, Mala! xx
Wolf Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 9:27 PM
You write 'disclosing' -- but only to trained eyes like yours, Kim. Bravo! ~ Gershon
Rodrigues Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 12:45 PM
Thank you for the “Bravo.” I appreciate you, Gershon!
Hind Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 4:09 PM
A very haunting image in my mind- beautiful in its 'despair'
Rodrigues Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 12:45 PM
Thank you, Paige! :)
Rose  Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 3:27 PM
This is quite a view Kim, you describe it so well, :)
Rodrigues Avatar
March 31, 2024 at 12:46 PM
Thank you, Rose!
Andresen Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 12:02 PM
- I can see the northern lights now and then... beautiful poem, Kim :) - hugs
Rodrigues Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 12:45 PM
So nice! Hugs ~
Dutta Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 10:39 AM
I didn't get opportunity to watch Great Aurora Borealis. A desire remained unfulfilled in this life. Love.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 30, 2024 at 12:45 PM
I haven’t seen a volcano or Aurora Borealis in real life. But I did see ash on the road shortly after the eruption of Mount St. Helens. Too bad I didn’t save any to show my kids. They probably would have been underwhelmed anyway. Hugs~
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