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Woven Worlds

Buoyant orange flames leap like a leopard stalking the sun. Posthumously, the mountain of smoke and ash collapsing on itself, selfishly stomping out joy, but for the Aurora Borealis, the joykill of skullduggery. Her light like song notes, tra-la-la-ing. Her beauty, unscrupulous, to the roaring volcanic beast. northern lights emeralds and pinks disclosing phantasm peaks valleys of despair

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 4/6/2024 11:45:00 AM

Fabulous imagery Kim. You weave unpretentious with quiet beauty. Congratulations! :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/5/2024 8:14:00 AM

Pure energy and imagery Kim. A woven world so well created. Prose sung to the tune of the tanka! Congratulations on your win!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/5/2024 7:02:00 PM

Thank you, Anaya!

Suzette Richards

Date: 4/5/2024 1:42:00 AM

The prose has undercurrents of the dramatic narrative, echoed in the final phase of the tanka. You lifted us up to the heavens in the prose poetry, only to be cast down in the valleys of despair in the final line of the tanka, creating a stark contrast. You successfully wove the two worlds of tanka and prose together in this feast for the eye and emotional experience by employing various figures of speech (e.g. personification, simile, etc) in this tribute to the force of nature. Congratulations on your fourth place win, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/5/2024 7:01:00 PM

So excited! Thank you, Suzette!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/2/2024 3:24:00 PM

Kim, it's an interesting contrast. The separate phenomena go on...one unaffected by the other. The local portion of our universe contains some amazing things to view and contemplate.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/3/2024 5:23:00 AM

Love how you said that…an interesting contrast, unaffected by each other. God bless you, Duke!

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 3/31/2024 4:09:00 PM

Dear Kim, you have painted picture of an unusual scene - which many of us just imagine in our mind's eyes! I marvel at your descriptive style and word choices! Love and warm wishes ~

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/31/2024 7:17:00 PM

Thank you, Mala! xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/30/2024 9:27:00 PM

You write 'disclosing' -- but only to trained eyes like yours, Kim. Bravo! ~ Gershon

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/31/2024 12:45:00 PM

Thank you for the “Bravo.” I appreciate you, Gershon!

Paige Hind

Date: 3/30/2024 4:09:00 PM

A very haunting image in my mind- beautiful in its 'despair'

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/31/2024 12:45:00 PM

Thank you, Paige! :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/30/2024 4:08:00 PM

just beautiful. I liked ''her light like song notes, tra-la-la-ing. Your imagery helped me to visualize something I've never seen. Thank you. Have a blessed evening, Sara PS Best wishes with the contest

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/31/2024 12:46:00 PM

Thank you, Sara! So glad! :)

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 3/30/2024 3:27:00 PM

This is quite a view Kim, you describe it so well, :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/31/2024 12:46:00 PM

Thank you, Rose!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/30/2024 12:02:00 PM

- I can see the northern lights now and then... beautiful poem, Kim :) - hugs

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/30/2024 4:07:00 PM

you are so fortunate to have that experience. :-)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/30/2024 12:45:00 PM

So nice! Hugs ~

Anisha Dutta

Date: 3/30/2024 10:39:00 AM

I didn't get opportunity to watch Great Aurora Borealis. A desire remained unfulfilled in this life. Love.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/30/2024 12:45:00 PM

I haven’t seen a volcano or Aurora Borealis in real life. But I did see ash on the road shortly after the eruption of Mount St. Helens. Too bad I didn’t save any to show my kids. They probably would have been underwhelmed anyway. Hugs~