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Poetic Form: Rhyme
Inspired: 2024 March 24
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It's Hell twenty-third century, they con Troll, got shot in the brain nothing vital, though my mind's at a loss an absence, helloo, I am but a guess in my own house, it sense I do naught exist for breath wit hold, me, the unwonted in touchy halls, a stairway estranged to each step of my soul, scared lost balance give aweigh myself, the battery--can't take it, no spark left, woe I was beside myself, I can't move, phone, I called, no answer, where is it ... nooo, finally, I'm out -- there's no ESCAPE! trachea's gorged too much oxygen, can't breathe, ohhh!

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Date: 3/24/2024 4:23:00 PM
Your rhyme scheme was creative as was your unique poem. Ouch! Getting shot in the brain does make for interesting rhymes. Clever one. have a great evening, Sara
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Hilo Poet
Date: 3/24/2024 4:57:00 PM
Thanks, Sara! It does trend on the brainless side--I'm in good company, tho' their one-up on me--LOL. Aloha, William
Date: 3/24/2024 12:32:00 PM
Yeah brains as vital organs is over hyped. Good one hilo, if not a bit weird
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Tom Woody
Date: 3/24/2024 2:31:00 PM
Yessir
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Hilo Poet
Date: 3/24/2024 2:14:00 PM
Ah, prodigal one came back a Wiseman, yes I put a barrel over Edward's side for his metaphoric monkeys, my friend, Aloha to your wife, William

Book: Shattered Sighs