Word Play

Time out of mind Mind out of time Of time I've run out I'm out of my mind If I steal back some time, Will I get back my mind? If I steal me some mind Will I gain me some time? Words out of time Words into rhyme Rhymes become timeless Writer goes mindless Time claims writer Mind's future's no brighter No more time left to steal No more mind left to heal Time out of mind Mind out of time Of time I've run out I'm out of my mind

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/9/2015 4:49:00 PM

I really like this, Mary. It's SO clever!! Let me go see examples of the randomlings now (still need to know if old poems are acceptable or not) Also can you soupmail me if it is acceptable to do several little poems for your contest, or do you prefer just one really good one?!

Mary Rotman
Date: 8/9/2015 5:05:00 PM

Any poem is welcome. ONE REALLY good one. I'm going to say this once because it takes too uch time. Pls forgive typos. I have a 4-month old ktten who does laps around the living room, which includes walking across the computer in my lap.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/9/2015 8:33:00 AM

love the word play Mary:-) hugs Jan xx

Mary Rotman
Date: 8/9/2015 9:40:00 AM

Thank you. Please feel free to critique it.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 8/9/2015 2:31:00 AM

Mary - This gem drives me 'out of my mind'...I see this as a song lyric! VERY clever word play here and also thank you SO much for the first place win in your contest - Tim

Mary Rotman
Date: 8/9/2015 9:42:00 AM

You;re welcome, Tim. And I love to be critiqued, so never hesitate!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 8/9/2015 2:25:00 AM

There are worse ways to lose your mind. lol Enjoyed following the play, SuZ

Aurore Severo

Date: 8/9/2015 1:01:00 AM

grammar and spelling is perfect!

Mary Rotman
Date: 8/9/2015 9:44:00 AM

Thank you. I am a copy editor, so it's nice to hear. I think I will check out a a few of your poems today. Mary