Nette Onclaud Poet Tanka

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Wooden Rafts Float

wooden sea- rafts float
  
     as the hardest beads

        the mildest prayers

offer layered dahlias

   for Holy Queen's regatta




~ Dedicated to Our Lady of Fatima's 90th Anniversary
 POTD/POTW
~ For Richard Lamoreaux's Poem of the Day Contest
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I was pleasantly glad to receive both awards for this
short form. It may have touched the spirit of those
who celebrate Mary's devotion as a Mother.  Resubmitted 4/11/2019

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Connie Marcum Wong April 28, 2019 at 6:12 AM Back again to congratulate you on your success with this wonderful Tanka Nette. Wonderful! : ) xxoo

Richard Lamoureux April 25, 2019 at 9:40 AM Hugs for a deserved win. Thanks for entering my contest.

Valerie Staton January 27, 2019 at 7:15 AM Very well written!

Connie Marcum Wong March 21, 2015 at 11:47 PM POTD today and also POTW! Wow, you are on a roll Nette. Congrats!!!

Thomas Martin March 20, 2015 at 4:55 PM Wonderful read a great use of the tanka form!

Connie Marcum Wong March 18, 2015 at 3:07 PM This is lovely Nette. Congratulations on it being chosen POTW!

Jan Allison March 17, 2015 at 11:56 AM Many congrats on poem of the week:-) Hugs Jan xx

Daver Austin March 16, 2015 at 11:07 AM Pretty stuff, nette. You might also call this a sadoka. Love those "layered dahlias" Love, daver

Neva Romaine March 16, 2015 at 10:30 AM Hey Nette: BIG congratulations on your lovely poem being chosen as POTW!! Such a beautiful tribute this is. Be Blessed, Neva

Kp Nunez March 15, 2015 at 6:36 PM and...back to the same mode...visit and congratulate you, kabayan! hugs!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders March 15, 2015 at 2:08 PM a lovely scene, Nette...congrats on being chosen TPOW!! Hugs, Rhonda

Casarah Nance March 15, 2015 at 7:18 AM Nice scene! Grats on poem of the week

Paul Callus March 10, 2015 at 12:24 PM Lovely dedication, Nette; here the rafts and song flow along the river's water, inspiring a feeling of calm and devotion. hugs // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis March 10, 2015 at 5:56 AM Your writing infuses devotion, dear Nette!

Cecilia Macfarlane March 9, 2015 at 9:11 PM Only you my dear Nette could make a wooden raft beautiful ride. Wonderful write! Hugs

Carrie Richards March 9, 2015 at 8:10 PM You never fail to excel !! Wonderful tanka, Nette !

Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2015 at 6:32 PM This is a festive one!

Greg Hoffman March 9, 2015 at 6:16 PM Once again you have written a wonderful poem,good luck in the contest

Rhoma Em March 9, 2015 at 3:17 PM The core of your poem is expressed beautifully through intangible images and feelings. Phrases that I like:"where the hardest beads and mildest hint of song offer layered dahlias." A spiritual lift!

Manny Paras March 9, 2015 at 2:27 PM Astounding interplay of words ending with a blessed fluvial parade, Nette. The scene just keeps streaming on my mind!

Sara Kendrick March 9, 2015 at 1:05 PM Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by.Tankas are not so easy to write but you make it look supreme..Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen March 9, 2015 at 12:54 PM - Another winning poem .... lovely poem, dear Nette - Good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison March 9, 2015 at 12:22 PM Such beautiful imagery Nette - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx