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Wooden Rafts Float

wooden sea- rafts float
  
     as the hardest beads

        the mildest prayers

offer layered dahlias

   for Holy Queen's regatta




~ Dedicated to Our Lady of Fatima's 90th Anniversary
 POTD/POTW
~ For Richard Lamoreaux's Poem of the Day Contest
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I was pleasantly glad to receive both awards for this
short form. It may have touched the spirit of those
who celebrate Mary's devotion as a Mother.  Resubmitted 4/11/2019

Copyright © Nette Onclaud | Year Posted 2015

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Connie Marcum Wong Date: 4/28/2019 6:12:00 AM Back again to congratulate you on your success with this wonderful Tanka Nette. Wonderful! : ) xxoo Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/25/2019 9:40:00 AM Hugs for a deserved win. Thanks for entering my contest. Login to Reply

Valerie Staton Date: 1/27/2019 7:15:00 AM Very well written! Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/21/2015 11:47:00 PM POTD today and also POTW! Wow, you are on a roll Nette. Congrats!!! Login to Reply

Thomas Martin Date: 3/20/2015 4:55:00 PM Wonderful read a great use of the tanka form! Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/18/2015 3:07:00 PM This is lovely Nette. Congratulations on it being chosen POTW! Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 3/17/2015 11:56:00 AM Many congrats on poem of the week:-) Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 3/16/2015 11:07:00 AM Pretty stuff, nette. You might also call this a sadoka. Love those "layered dahlias" Love, daver Login to Reply

Neva Romaine Date: 3/16/2015 10:30:00 AM Hey Nette: BIG congratulations on your lovely poem being chosen as POTW!! Such a beautiful tribute this is. Be Blessed, Neva Login to Reply

Kp Nunez Date: 3/15/2015 6:36:00 PM and...back to the same mode...visit and congratulate you, kabayan! hugs! Login to Reply

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 3/15/2015 2:08:00 PM a lovely scene, Nette...congrats on being chosen TPOW!! Hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply

Casarah Nance Date: 3/15/2015 7:18:00 AM Nice scene! Grats on poem of the week Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 3/10/2015 12:24:00 PM Lovely dedication, Nette; here the rafts and song flow along the river's water, inspiring a feeling of calm and devotion. hugs // paul Login to Reply

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 3/10/2015 5:56:00 AM Your writing infuses devotion, dear Nette! Login to Reply

Cecilia Macfarlane Date: 3/9/2015 9:11:00 PM Only you my dear Nette could make a wooden raft beautiful ride. Wonderful write! Hugs Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 3/9/2015 8:10:00 PM You never fail to excel !! Wonderful tanka, Nette ! Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/9/2015 6:32:00 PM This is a festive one! Login to Reply

Greg Hoffman Date: 3/9/2015 6:16:00 PM Once again you have written a wonderful poem,good luck in the contest Login to Reply

Rhoma Em Date: 3/9/2015 3:17:00 PM The core of your poem is expressed beautifully through intangible images and feelings. Phrases that I like:"where the hardest beads and mildest hint of song offer layered dahlias." A spiritual lift! Login to Reply

Manny Paras Date: 3/9/2015 2:27:00 PM Astounding interplay of words ending with a blessed fluvial parade, Nette. The scene just keeps streaming on my mind! Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/9/2015 1:05:00 PM Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by.Tankas are not so easy to write but you make it look supreme..Sara Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/9/2015 12:54:00 PM - Another winning poem .... lovely poem, dear Nette - Good luck :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 3/9/2015 12:22:00 PM Such beautiful imagery Nette - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx Login to Reply