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Wonderland III: The Watchmaker's Tale

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Originally published: 28th June 2020

Image by Clker-Free-Vector-Images from Pixabay

With my thanks and apologies to Lewis Carroll and Geoffrey Chaucer.


I:      Prologue
II:    The Hatter's Tale
III:   The Watchmaker's Tale
IV:   The Hairdresser's Tale
V:    The Chef's Tale
VI:   The Sailor's Tale
VII:  The Preacher's Tale
VIII: Conclusion


Morning Having sighed a great sigh He perused all his tools From the mainsprings and tweezers To the wheels and the jewels. He removed the large case latch From the pocket watch cover To survey all the insides As he would any other. He wasn't familiar With a watch of that kind And confused why the workings Ran two days behind. He adjusted his loupe lens And then gasped at least twice At the solid gold workings Inside the device. Noon He rang up the owner Who was due to arrive At the shop to collect it At twelve twenty-five. "OK I will fix it In time for your date But as it's important I'm upping my rate." The owner grew worried And made it quite clear By accepting the offer Amid cries of "Oh Dear!" The watchmaker laughed As he put the phone down. He could now spend the extra That night in the town. Night Once inside of The Tabard He ignored his bad health And turned to his drinking To help pardon himself. Having switched all the gold In the watch for cheap tack He then swapped it for whisky With a man in the back. On his way home he stumbled Through the storm and the wind Tripping over a cat Who'd appeared and just grinned. Later That Night Slumped under a tree And left gasping for air The watchmaker's own time Stopped right then and there.

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Date: 7/20/2022 4:22:00 PM
This series is really fun for me, trying to gather clues culled from the Wonderland characters ("oh dear" from the white rabbit, and the cat that "just grinned") but also piecing together the interconnecting points between your poems and characters. Loved the "watchmaker's time stopped right then and there". Great job on these!
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Date: 7/21/2022 1:41:00 AM
Hi John. I'm reading the poem through again as I type to see what my mind was up to at the time :) Yes!! You are right John: The white rabbit (His sigh of "Oh Dear!"..His watch 2 days behind. Set on 12.25 (Disney's pocket watch was anyway)..mentioned a date the rabbit is going on..) Yes.. The Cheshire Cat grinning.....The line: "And turned to his drinking To help pardon himself." - The Pardoner whose tale's moral is that the love of money is the root of all evil. I didn't stick to the Chaucer's narrative too much but mentioned gold, death and the idea of dying beneath the tree - the root. I think that's it. :) I really appreciate you having the stamina to read them. Cheers - Gary
Date: 12/5/2020 6:29:00 AM
Poetic justice! Thanks for the entertainment of these tall tales, Gary.
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Gary Radice
Date: 12/5/2020 7:18:00 AM
:) Thanks Geoffrey! I'm glad you enjoyed these tales. Cheers - Gary
Date: 11/20/2020 3:06:00 PM
Another fabulous write Gary, the watchmaker’s demise was the result of his crime, which was worse than him doing time... Belle
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Date: 11/22/2020 1:35:00 PM
Belle, I wish I had thought of the idea of him 'doing time' - a great line. Cheers - Gary
Date: 10/25/2020 6:29:00 AM
Love this Gary. My step-dad a watchmaker, I loved watching him work with all the tiny little pieces. I don't believe he ever found solid gold though. ;) Linda
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Gary Radice
Date: 10/25/2020 9:30:00 AM
Thank you Linda! :) Your step dad must be / have been so skilled - I really admire abilities and skills like that. I liked the idea of telling a story behind the white rabbit's watch stuck on 12.25 and running two days behind and just letting my imagination wander. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 10/14/2020 1:08:00 AM
Really like how you cleverly interweave the stories in your poems with the rhyming sections which gives them a traditional feel. I really enjoyed reading all four and am not surprised of your competition win!
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Date: 10/14/2020 2:06:00 AM
Hi Suzanne. Thanks so much for your lovely, encouraging comments. I enjoy interweaving poems where I can and referring to the classics and mixing it all up a bit for a bit of fun :) As well as Alice, this particular poem relates to The Pardoner's Tale (slightly) with themes of "the love of money is the root of all evil" (hence the tree where he died etc) I plan 6 of these poems in all- if I ever get round to them. :) Cheers - Gary
Date: 7/1/2020 8:54:00 AM
Such a witty tale of the watchmaker Gary. Enjoyed reading it with those vivid details Congratulations on your win :) Keep writing and inspiring!
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Gary Radice
Date: 7/1/2020 10:08:00 AM
Thank you for your lovely comments Aditi. Cheers :) Gary.
Date: 6/29/2020 10:33:00 PM
An entertaining composition that left me smiling, well-penned indeed, my friend, Gary, also, my compliments for your efforts for being recognized, achieving 1st Place, Kudos! -- Aloha~@William
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Date: 6/30/2020 3:21:00 AM
Thank you William for dropping by and for your lovely comments. I like the idea of making up backgrounds to the characters' stories in Alice in Wonderland. :)