Within Her Song

Her musical style may have been avant - garde
  But her sad songs left ennui emotions and hearts scarred

 When she found herself within the lyrics of her song
 Her romantic elan diminished before long 

 She had given him carte blanche to her heart
 But soon, a deja vu of broken dreams it did impart

 She thought that his love was bona fide
 But deep within an anomaly did reside

 A cacophony of musical notes echoed across baroque structures
 Where love's melody was but a dilettante allure
                              ~
 1-14-18
 Contest: Ten words ten lines
 Sponsor: Silent One
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 2/12/2018 1:50:00 PM
Congrats, Joseph. Well done.
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Date: 2/9/2018 6:35:00 AM
Congratulations Joseph for this poem being on the best new poem list 7.
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Date: 1/31/2018 8:38:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Joseph.
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Date: 1/31/2018 2:06:00 AM
A splendid creation with the words weaved in so beautifully Joseph! Congratulations on your win! : )
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Date: 1/30/2018 1:18:00 AM
A fine piece, Joseph, well done! Regards, Viv
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Date: 1/29/2018 8:24:00 PM
Hi Joseph! I really like your poem and just wanted to say congrats on your placement in the contest too. :D
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Date: 1/29/2018 8:15:00 PM
Returning with congratulations Joseph, for your wonderful win with your amazing poem. ~Susan
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Date: 1/29/2018 4:52:00 PM
Lovely poem, Joseph! Congrats on your win :)
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Date: 1/29/2018 1:54:00 PM
Great take on the contest Joseph.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest
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Date: 1/25/2018 5:12:00 PM
Beautiful rhythm and rhyme tells a deep, sad story of lost love Joseph. A wondrous write weaving the required words with ease. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/24/2018 5:25:00 PM
A wondrous song Joseph, enjoyed this musical post, best of luck in the contest;-)
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Date: 1/24/2018 9:15:00 AM
Perfectly intertwined with thoughts of the weeping willow Joseph. Beautifully written.
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Date: 1/23/2018 1:02:00 PM
Wow Joseph I like the way you incorporated the ten words, they blended seamlessly, cacophony and baroque tough words, you're a brave man I never even tried this one, reads like a winner to me!
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Date: 1/22/2018 12:06:00 AM
Wow, a beautiful song my friend Joseph, which you've coupled with a very appropriate image of the weeping willow. It is so sad for a woman facing this situation. Loved the way you crafted the poem. A FAVE from me ...Maria PS all the best in the contest.
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Date: 1/15/2018 4:08:00 AM
A job well done indeed, Joseph - excellent! My very best regards. :) john
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Joseph May
Date: 1/15/2018 8:34:00 AM
Thank you John
Date: 1/14/2018 6:14:00 PM
wow, you showed great accomplishment in both meeting this challenge and also in doing it so quickly!! I can't even begin to think where to take my ideas with this one. Wonderful job, Joseph.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/14/2018 9:06:00 PM
Thank you Andrea...hugs
Date: 1/14/2018 1:55:00 PM
- A lovely balance in this song, Joseph - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Joseph May
Date: 1/14/2018 9:06:00 PM
Thank you Anne..hugs
Date: 1/14/2018 12:30:00 PM
Well written Joseph..best for a win.
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Joseph May
Date: 1/14/2018 12:51:00 PM
Thank you Vijay
Date: 1/14/2018 12:23:00 PM
i enjoyed the delicate rhythm of this piece, joseph.. very nice!..huggs
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Joseph May
Date: 1/14/2018 12:51:00 PM
Thank you Nette
Date: 1/14/2018 9:10:00 AM
Wow Joseph. A well written poem, this is. Powerful. Good luck in the contest :)
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Joseph May
Date: 1/14/2018 9:13:00 AM
Thank you so much Heidi..Glad you like it
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