Wishes

It doesn't matter if I'm asleep or awake Dreaming is my constant state Visions of my deepest wants Of love and home forever taunt The things I want but cannot have For one reason or another I cannot grab My deepest needs ever out of reach What is this yearning supposed to teach The only lesson I've learned so far That it is useless to wish upon a star My dreams and wishes forever grow But wishing for a thing does not make it so

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Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/30/2013 3:48:00 AM

A VERY BEAUTIFUL PIECE OF WRITTING MAY YOUR WISHES FOREVER GROW

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 8/25/2013 10:01:00 AM

That last line is killer; loved it! I see a lot of you in me in your work; perhaps I have found another poetic kindred spirit. I would tighten up the rhythm, smooth out a few wrinkles here and there in flow and perhaps reword a line or two, but as I said to you before: these little things do not, in any way, detract from the beauty and sentiment expressed. You, my dear, have true talent, and I am enjoying reading your work :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/24/2013 8:52:00 PM

A BEAUTIFUL PIECE I ENJOYED

Ken Carroll

Date: 8/24/2013 5:50:00 PM

HI April, Nice write and kindest wishes for you.. Regards, Ken..

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/23/2013 10:04:00 AM

one can dream their life away, yet to write poetry as good as this, you have got your wish,,, thank you... lovely and enjoyable to read this....

James Marshall Goff

Date: 8/22/2013 8:41:00 PM

April....dream and you shall see what will be! Nice! jimbo

... Gigno

Date: 8/20/2013 2:38:00 AM

!!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2013 3:41:00 PM

this is so very true. I enjoyed seeing this one today, April.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/19/2013 8:39:00 AM

Got that one correct..Enjoyed reading your work..It has great rhythm, rhyme and flow to it..I enjoyed the topic presented..Thanks for the visit to my work..I am glad that you came..Sara

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/19/2013 6:10:00 AM

I always say dreaming keeps us alive, without the hope of wishes and dreams where would we be? I enjoyed this piece, it made me reflect back at my own life and makes the reader look around them and ponder thoughts! Good write!