Wish Ungranted

From seconds to minutes to hours to night, then to day,
Time moved, taking with it, the bliss I was sharing with you.
Life's moments cannot be retrieved; so what could I do
while there in the warmth of your strong loving arms I lay?

With torrents and torrents of ticking and ticking away,
relentlessly, cruelly, Time rained down upon us that night.
Dark faded to dawn; I was wishing with all of my might
that Time would suspend itself, and in your arms I would stay!

But Time is an executioner one cannot sway.
How I wish (though it seems the mere pausing of Time is a sin)
that Time could have stopped, and my last night with you would have been
serene and unhastened, Time miffed by its own delay.

   
For Barbara Gorelick's Contest:
Once Upon a "Time"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Makama Avatar
March 23, 2013 at 9:32 AM
beautiful poem, well written. In such a windy and snowy day, reading this piece just completes my relaxation. What a poem!
Poet Avatar
August 8, 2012 at 12:34 AM
One of the best poem you have ever penned!!!!!
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February 26, 2011 at 12:20 PM
Once again,bow my head to this precious gem!!---kash
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January 22, 2011 at 10:53 AM
Read this gem once again! I wonder why in brackets you wrote(though it........Time is sin).
Poet Avatar
January 9, 2011 at 11:00 AM
Came here to read this poem once more!Don't know how many times I have read it already!Sometimes I think if we could expand the beautiful moments like elastic bands.......
La France Avatar
December 7, 2010 at 7:55 AM
So many wonderful lines in this poem, Andrea, it is a winner to me, you captured the essence of time from seconds, to minutes, to hours.. ticking ticking away~beautiful~
Babcock Avatar
December 4, 2010 at 8:41 AM
If only we could stop that moment of time . A wonderful write Andrea. God Bless Phyo
Taylor Avatar
December 3, 2010 at 9:14 AM
Thank you for the congrats! I love this piece! You really have a gift. I am certain you will do well in this contest. Good Luck!
Wellington Avatar
December 2, 2010 at 9:38 PM
Andrea thank you for your sweet comments, I also love your poem too and think it is ironic that we both see time as our enemy on both sides of the fence. Good luck to you. Blessings, Joy (Jew)
Sweetheart Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 3:21 PM
SOUPY MAIL..luv..
Anish Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 1:22 PM
Time is something which wears us all down. "one thins is ceratin that life flies....."(Omar Khayam). Nice metaphor when you compare to a rainstorm. Love Matthew Anish
Fillmore Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 9:45 AM
Another good one Andrea! Best of luck in the contest:)
Sweetheart Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 6:28 AM
Soup Mail ..Andrea...
Neels Avatar
December 1, 2010 at 3:30 AM
Andrea, this has to be my favorite.. I absolutely love it, wishing you all the best for the contest.. love Wilma
Onclaud Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 11:48 PM
Andear dear, thanks for passing by my page to comment on " ACROSTIC of a CANDLE.." so inspiring! can you please do a vonyest similar to this one?? really, i was so challened doing this and had to make it unique for you... just a thought!! huggs to you and finally, i'm in the xontets.. :) warmest, nette
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November 30, 2010 at 6:18 PM
This is a great write Andrea ! I researched Enlosed Ryhme, and it seems as if you pulled this one off. I read it three times. The third time I felt its woo. Loved it dear poet ! much love, james
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November 30, 2010 at 5:49 PM
liked the time raining down line, also the feeling of so near yet so far you have put across so well.Andrea. as far as the poem eternal goes, i was trying to get the words more on living sublime at the centre as four down, then the poem makes more of itself, i am just having trouble getting it centred however, it will get done thank you for checking it out
Skyles-Theoklapoet Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 1:34 PM
So good Andrea.I'm gonna give it a shot with this one to.Happy holidays Your friend Teresa Thanks for your very nice comment.
Onclaud Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 11:01 AM
hi again, andrea... hope you'll enjoy this senryu for your pleasure. it's on my page and mail as well! IMPT. SOUP MAIL! FLAVOR OF YULETIDE TWIGS pine scent on lamp’s shawl/ littered with long-stemmed moon threads/ life inhales sweet bliss /
K. Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 9:02 AM
I sure liked your take on the challenge here Andrea! Time indeed waits for no one and sighs indeed that it does that-- I hope this places high! Elusive time that can be a bane for lovers indeed ;) -- hugs to you :) nikko :)
Onclaud Avatar
November 30, 2010 at 1:37 AM
andrea...this grating, well-scribed piece resounds with the rhythm of time's essence. best of luck in the contest! URGENT! SOUP MAIL:) warmest, nette
Milgate Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 10:44 PM
Impressed as always, good luck. Thank you for your comments, I respect them so much. Hope holidays are bringing you some extra happiness.
Bloomsfield Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 10:42 PM
So emotive ,dear lady. .romantic and sad sweet nostalgic feeling,must be with the winners and hey your christmas tree contest got me inspired :)thankyou.
Skyles-Theoklapoet Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 1:59 PM
This was just fantastic it brought back a solome memory.You got soupmail.Your friend Teresa
Brown Avatar
November 29, 2010 at 10:42 AM
May your week bring you good health,may your heart overflow with love, and may your life bring you amazing inspiration to continue your writing. I enjoyed reading your fabulous poetry this morning and thank you for sharing it Andrea. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol
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