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winter sky

all the lights are blurred a winter sky is falling~ snow on my eyelash

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/29/2023 4:37:00 AM

Way to go with this winter winner in Tania's contest. Congratulations to you. Thank you for sharing it with us. Sara K

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/25/2023 11:46:00 AM

This is more like haiku than some I am seeing. Well done

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/25/2023 3:31:00 PM

Honored AD -- BTW, what was the one Chris gave you first place with - I want to put it on my Haiku blog - Love it - something about nuns in a row/neighbors at my door?

Paul Callus

Date: 12/24/2023 2:36:00 PM

At first I wondered why the lights were blurred (but blamed it on the weather), then snow on your eyelash reveiled the real culprit! I think in time you'll be getting hooked to these short Japanese forms, Craig :) Congrats & regards // paul

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/24/2023 7:39:00 PM

Thank you Paul - Merry Christmas and, yes, the Asian forms have been a foggy venue for me, but I will try to see more clearly! Would love a comment on my blog, as I do drift without a sail? Agree or not - just add to help those willing to to learn - thanks my friend

Tom Woody

Date: 12/24/2023 1:16:00 PM

Lovely. Just... Lovely

Tania Kitchin

Date: 12/24/2023 1:01:00 PM

Craig, congratulations on your winning placement with your creative haiku!

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 12/17/2023 11:24:00 PM

I felt this one . So beautiful

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/18/2023 4:57:00 AM

Thank you Aura!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 12/16/2023 8:00:00 AM

I love this Craig I have not written one for a couple of years. I would be hard put on to write one this fine kudos Craig I am favouring this hugs Shadow

Tom Woody
Date: 12/24/2023 1:16:00 PM

I favour it as well

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/16/2023 10:26:00 AM

Thanks so much Shadow

Kelly Deschler

Date: 12/15/2023 4:49:00 PM

A lovely write, Craig ... We could use a little snowfall here. It's looking like a green Christmas for us this year ...

Tom Woody
Date: 12/24/2023 1:15:00 PM

Sooooooooo loverly

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/15/2023 7:54:00 PM

Still got a few days Kelly - wishing for ya & those back up north!

Di11y Da11y

Date: 12/14/2023 3:46:00 PM

I had to nip back to this one after reading it this morning. I loved the dual impression this left me with of the outer world and then hyper focus on the self in a moment in time. It really conveys on multiple levels the idea of just stopping and experiencing a moment. I'm no expert on haiku but I like what this conjures in so few words

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/14/2023 7:01:00 PM

Thank you DD, If I can seduce three lovely ladies to share a moment, it doesn't really matter, really, much else, nor how it was accomplished - hugs to all

Craig Cornish

Date: 12/14/2023 1:18:00 PM

Thank you for the overly generous comments, yet there is nothing that terrifies me more than Haiku and other Asian forms which have more rules, more preconceived conditions, more analysis and pontifications, more experts, more heated pseudo intellectual discussions, and heated arguments...Thanks so much but I truly don't know if this is good Haiku and I've read volumes (really) page upon page and even the experts contradict each other - no gerunds (ing) - dangling participles, honored for love

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/21/2023 7:29:00 AM

Ahh, I agree with your thoughts, dear Craig. Honestly, just as Ink said, I had similar opinions about a haiku poem, that it's not much of a technical thing, but after joining soup I realised that there's more to the depths than appears to the eye haha. I've been trying to do various forms and simplify my style, so as to achieve the best flow, whilst getting creative in metaphors with a bit less adjectives. But, it's still a long way.. Seeing yours and everyone's writes truly inspires me to enhance my poetry and there's so much to learn here. As Ink said, your haiku poem truly fascinated my heart as well, with its imagery and delicate richness! Plus, the flow is really excellent ~ really amazing :)

Ink Empress
Date: 12/14/2023 9:24:00 PM

Ah yess dear craig i learnt so much ever since I’ve been on soup, about haiku rules.. i used to think haiku is no big deal but from andrea and few others here that do haiku and these forms so well i got to know that theres more to a haiku than i actually knew before. I seem to get really wordy, and these forms really help me with being disciplined. But seeing your haiku, honestly no one would have thought that you feel this way. You’ve nailed it. I did a haiku big event during autumn on instagram. I read over 100 haiku to vote for winners, But i must say your haiku is worth all the accolades. For me personally the flow is everything and also how picturesque this is truly made me go wow! Well done craig.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/13/2023 10:19:00 PM

Ohhh wowwww, I absolutely love everything about this haiku, the delicate description of snow falling on the eyelash, how gorgeous and poetically elegant is this! You've so wonderfully painted a wintry ambience here, dear Craig. It captures an instance so beautifully, it's like you've painted a moment here.. Beautifully done, wishing you all the best for the contest :)

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/14/2023 1:18:00 PM

Hiya, thank you - please see above

Ink Empress

Date: 12/13/2023 10:01:00 PM

Oh my gosh, dear craig. This is one of the most beautiful haiku ive read on winter theme, not exaggerating. The flow and imagery you’ve painted in such a seamless manner is beyond vivid and stunning. I especially love “ winter sky is falling” and “ snow on my eyelash” impeccable! Best wishes for the contest, pleasure always reading you

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/15/2023 1:12:00 PM

Very honored Inky - You've inspired me to blog on the subject, perhaps we'll get some takers as it's perhaps the most misunderstood along with other Eastern forms that developed in a totally separate environment from those that evolved from Latin and the Romance languages & why it has been a struggle over the years to integrate it into Western poetry - lost in translation if you will - but more than a translation of languages, it's a translation of lifestyle and thought as well.

Craig Cornish
Date: 12/14/2023 1:21:00 PM

Inky - thank you, please see above - Haiku scares the heck out of me and I've, quite honestly, ever written a good one (according to the pros) by accident & why I write so few - the only forms that intimidate me!