Winter - 1, Cold Wind

Cold wind passed my side
Just I wanted much to hide
But park was too wide

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 9/24/2020 5:06:00 PM
I have studied Japanese haiku poetry, and have found your haiku to be very good.
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Makoto Ogino
Date: 9/25/2020 2:52:00 AM
Dear W.Blaine wheeler, Thank you for your visiting and kind message!
Date: 1/30/2016 2:13:00 PM
One of the best I read so far... I like it very much..
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Makoto Ogino
Date: 1/30/2016 7:22:00 PM
Dear Lana, Thank you for reading ! I'm encouraged so much.
Date: 12/31/2015 5:07:00 AM
Very beautiful! As I have read here and there, every Haiku has been made based on two seperate and related scenes. If I am not rong, then, I should like to know why yours is composed of three scences: cold wind passing, hiding, and bringing the width of the park to the view. With special thanks.
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Makoto Ogino
Date: 12/31/2015 8:33:00 AM
Hi Ghoamrea, thank you for your reaing! It's true, so called sandan-gire is not recommened manner with few exceptons (therefore, it is not an absolutely prohibited technique). However, my case is different. Simply I didn't care of it. As I've just started writing haiku, I'll improve it. Many thanks for your comment.
Date: 12/19/2015 5:09:00 PM
i like your winter haiku **SKAT**
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Makoto Ogino
Date: 12/19/2015 9:25:00 PM
Hi SKAT A, Thank you for your reAding. So grateful.
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