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Wilted Summer Smiles

weary Deep in warm wine Outshining russet moon Glazed in the glow of honey glass Gold breeze Drifting Along the flood Of wilted summer smiles, While my sky sings in the fall of Silence

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/3/2024 7:55:00 AM

You make shadows beautiful.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/17/2023 3:27:00 AM

You always weave words in a way that truly makes me go wow! In awe! Captivated! Absolutely stunning cinquain chain this is. Where do i start? I love the russet moon, fitting for the theme of your poem, “ glazed in the glow of honey glass” love the alliterations and flow of that line! “ wilted summer smiles” very creative line! “While my sky sings in the fall of silence” wow! Thats a profound line! Thank you for writing! Congratulations on winning

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/14/2023 1:10:00 AM

Oh dear Lioness, you're truly a very soulful poetess and I'm awestruck by the way you've woven heartfelt emotions in such a beautifully shimmering wordplay.. "Deep in warm wine outshining russet moon", " Glow of honey glass", "gold breeze" Ahh, this is so enchanting and surely reminds me of the russet full moon.. "Wilted summer smiles" That's so poignant.. "While my sky sings in the fall of silence" Ah, I felt that to the core.. A beautiful take for the cinquain contest, absolutely love it! :)

Bill Baker

Date: 10/13/2023 3:46:00 PM

You set a lovely table for a relaxing and enjoyable time, Lioness. I particularly enjoy the last line, "While my sky sings in the fall of Silence". I love the sounds of silence. They speak to my soul. Belated welcome to Poetry Soup, I'll be following your lovely poetry and hope you'll read mine as well. I look forward to getting to know you through your poetry, Lioness On Paper. A poet friend (in the making), Bill

Fading Star Silence

Date: 10/13/2023 1:20:00 PM

Ahhh..the diversity of your poetry is something I so truly admire, brilliant poetess and fellow cocoa caffeine junkie and beautiful sis! I truly reel in your words of rawness, beauty, depth, power, and the delicacy that shines through in each of your breathtakingly woven words..I am truly always in awe of your natural talent and poetic soul!

Tom Woody

Date: 10/13/2023 7:15:00 AM

This is quite serene. I can picture myself with a bottle of warm, summer wine, taking in the scenery around me, enjoying the quiet and still