Ma Yaseen Poet Triolet

Why You Left

You departed, my Motif, but why did you?
Unfinished, my carpet lies, colors awry.
In the weave of my days, you were the light.
You departed, my Motif, but why did you?
Absent your Taleem, I'm lost in the night,
My heart, your target, where arrows lie.
You departed, my Motif, but why did you?
Unfinished, my carpet lies, colors awry.



© 25/09/2014
Malik Yaseen

*Taleem is the script used for carpet weaving (kashmiri, persain).
 For a contest by Alferd Vassallo

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Dalia Shahein January 4, 2016 at 8:32 PM Mesmerized by this one , really a great capturing one ...thank you very much for sharing this delightful poem.....hugs / / :) dalia.

Skat A May 26, 2015 at 5:03 PM moved by your poem. SK

Doris Jamoner September 29, 2014 at 1:35 PM Nicely written.. I love the theme. I love how it was crafted and the choice of words are great! Hope to read more of your works soon ^^ Ma Yaseen September 29, 2014 at 11:07 PM Many many thanks Dear Doris, It is my pleasure to have a visitor like you... I will be visiting you regularly... Stay blessed dear// Malik

Paul Callus September 28, 2014 at 8:04 AM I like the originality of this write. Your motif being the main figure who you address with sadness. Your 'carpet' will only be complete if she were to come back to you. // paul Ma Yaseen September 28, 2014 at 10:55 PM Thanks Paul, I like the way you made the crux of these lines... i will be a regular visitor of your profile. Stay Blesssed

Matthew Anish September 27, 2014 at 10:12 AM Stimulating. But what does "deft" and "weft" mean? Peace & Love Matthew Anish Ma Yaseen September 28, 2014 at 2:48 AM Weft can be called as the yarn or the parallel threads which run from one end to other and over them the carpet is woven, deft can be called as the siklfull person. Ma Yaseen September 28, 2014 at 2:48 AM Thanks for your visit dear

Gary Bateman September 26, 2014 at 9:06 AM Malik . . . Extraordinarily fantastic work here with the Triolet format, which is a very tough one to do. You've handled this one superbly!! and it's a "7" definitely in my book. You may want to check the word "Incogorous" out however. I think you meant "Incongruous." Just a thought. I enjoyed the message of your poem here immensely!! Cheers and All the Best, Gary Gary Bateman September 26, 2014 at 5:01 PM Malik . . . Thanks for your note. I will be happy to read your works. You have an open invitation always to read mine and comment. It's great for us to be able to exchange ideas. Have a wonderful weekend!! Cheer and My Best Wishes, Gary Ma Yaseen September 26, 2014 at 9:30 AM Much welcome Mr. Gary for your comment and for pointing out the typing error, I read it what I meant but 'n' slipped cleverly.. Thanks for your sincere and kind words, Highly appreciated. hope you will keep visiting me.. Good bless you sir

Charmaine Chircop September 26, 2014 at 7:18 AM May your carpwt be weaved to perfection with your loved one's return.A beautiful tapestry of words.Tnks for visiting my poetry-Charma: ) Ma Yaseen September 26, 2014 at 7:27 AM Thanks for your kind words and best wishes,,, Malik

Liam Mcdaid September 26, 2014 at 4:08 AM really beautifully painted malik Ma Yaseen September 26, 2014 at 5:28 AM Liam , many many thanks, your comments are always welcome.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 25, 2014 at 11:28 PM Great flow, nice words chosen..:) like like! It looks easy for you..:) Ma Yaseen September 25, 2014 at 11:47 PM thanks Olive...

Dr.Ram Mehta September 25, 2014 at 9:30 AM Nicely done Triolet on the love and break up, Malik Ma Yaseen September 25, 2014 at 10:51 PM your words are always welcome Dr. Mehta, I feel like privileged when you comment on my write. hope you will keep visiting me. God Bless you

Maurice Yvonne September 25, 2014 at 7:57 AM You did a wonderful job with this difficult form. Thank you. Ma Yaseen September 25, 2014 at 10:49 PM many many thanks for your visit Mr Maurice, encouraging words are much needed.... God bless you

Sara Kendrick September 25, 2014 at 5:16 AM Enjoyed reading your creative work..I am glad that I chose this one to read today.Great use of weaver's terms to interweave a poem..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Ma Yaseen September 25, 2014 at 5:18 AM thanks for your visit and kind words,,, these words are like nourishment to the budding poets alike me.

Demetrios Trifiatis September 25, 2014 at 4:26 AM Intriguing with hidden meaning so beautifully interwoven! Excellent my friend, Malik! Ma Yaseen September 25, 2014 at 4:46 AM Thanks sir, your words mean a lot.... Feel glad you like my write... God Bless