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"From deep within my heart I always catch the scent of my Beloved. How can I help but follow that fragrance?" Quote By _ Rumi
Once we were a happy pair of doves Seeking warmth under each other’s wings By sundown, we flew to our little nest In our sweet space, we sought easeful rest Even when the Earth’s in full glory Now I bide alone, dull and dreary Oh! Dear! Why have you so hurriedly left me? Was it to make me drift in this turbulent sea? We have known life’s depth and worth Each morn, for us was love’s rebirth We walked close to paths supernal And lived ever in love eternal I have lost the rhyme n’ rhythm of life I see the world around with sorrows rife I, a broken reed far beyond repair With no songs to be played now or ever Each flower recalls to me your sweet grace The wind tossed petals remind me of your sad face On silent nights the fragrance of your hair Comes wafting, and for a while, I feel you near A boundless emptiness now fills my space The question –‘What next’ stares at my face Yet never shall I falter, but shall endure my fate Hoping, we shall meet at Heaven’s Rainbow Gate July.22.2022 ~ Placed First~ Words. 189 Rhyme Rumi Poetry Contest Sponsor- Sotto Poet

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Date: 8/18/2022 3:47:00 AM
Congratulations on this winner. Way to go. Very emotive and expressive work. Sara
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Date: 8/17/2022 2:08:00 PM
Valsa, beautiful poem and image, I love your poem and congratulations on your win in the contest ~Constance
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Date: 8/14/2022 2:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely yet sad write. Love your line, "Hoping, we shall meet at Heaven’s Rainbow Gate." Have a fun/blessed~~day/week..............
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Date: 8/13/2022 8:21:00 AM
This so sublime. You have deeply conveyed the message of the quote in a way that is unforgettable. Congratulations dear friend.
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Date: 8/12/2022 11:17:00 PM
Valsa, your poem is both beautiful and poignant. “I have lost the rhyme n’ rhythm of life I see the world around with sorrows rife” these lines express that kind of pain brilliantly. Congratulations on having this wonderful poem honored with First Place. It is very deserving. Blessings xxoo
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Valsa George
Date: 8/13/2022 4:19:00 AM
Dear Connie, your lovely comment is much appreciated. Losing one's love is more painful than can be expressed in words. Though this is fictional, you could enjoy it as you have experienced the pangs of parting ! Thanks a lot dear friend...
Date: 7/22/2022 6:31:00 PM
Enjoyed, whilst awaiting your poem about Droupadi Murmu . . . .Aloha!
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Valsa George
Date: 7/23/2022 9:43:00 AM
Perhaps you are more competent to write a limerick on her :)
Date: 7/22/2022 3:38:00 PM
Hello Valse George, we never know what our fate will be. We must wait to see what happens next. Blessings my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 7/23/2022 10:42:00 AM
Hello Vasla, yes we are ignorant of what waits us. I agree. You are welcome. Hugs.
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Valsa George
Date: 7/23/2022 9:47:00 AM
Of course we are ignorant of what awaits us ! Thank you Darlene for your reading and commenting !
Date: 7/22/2022 5:49:00 AM
A lovely poem reminiscing of love --happy yet poignant juxtaposition resonates throughout. Best to you, Valsa.
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Valsa George
Date: 7/23/2022 9:45:00 AM
Thank you for your insightful comment Vijay !
Date: 7/22/2022 3:08:00 AM
Lovely writing. God bless you. Love, Gina
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Valsa George
Date: 7/23/2022 9:44:00 AM
Thanks a lot Gina
Date: 7/22/2022 1:55:00 AM
That's the romantic way I should write. Beautiful and loving. A poem I yearn for, dear Valsa.
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Valsa George
Date: 7/22/2022 2:56:00 AM
When you say you hve to model on my poem, I feel more than flattered ! Thanks a lot dear poet friend
Date: 7/21/2022 9:27:00 PM
A deep, soulful and sorrowful write, Valsa. Beautifully penned. Enjoyed every of the 189 words
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Valsa George
Date: 7/22/2022 2:54:00 AM
Thanks a lot Seeker friend ! Your words have given a new wave of energ to me....

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