Whitney2: Suitcase

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Forsaken abandoned old vintage luggage suitcase on the field summer sun light

One suitcase Left in a field Purposely Like a bread crumb On a trail Dropped by Hansel So he may find his way home

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2017 5:45:00 PM

You were kind of on the same track as I was but veered off in an opposite direction from me in this theme. I really like how this turned into a "bread crumb" kind of symbol!!

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 9/6/2017 6:03:00 PM

I wrote two sedokas. This was the one I like better. Thanks so much for your comments.

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/5/2017 10:05:00 AM

Well crafted my friend...luck for the contest...god bless...^WW^

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 9/5/2017 10:12:00 AM

Thanks, WW.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/4/2017 3:59:00 PM

Well written verse--good imagination!

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 9/5/2017 10:13:00 AM

Thanks, Vijay.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/4/2017 2:31:00 PM

Oh how clever Dale I have got 5 lines done then the muse failed but the silly limerick came to me:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 9/4/2017 2:34:00 PM

Thanks, Jan. I LOVE your limerick. But this poem is the first time in days the muse got out of bed and actually did something.