Carolyn Devonshire Poet Lay

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White

Whale

White Whale

In oceans deep, the white whale sings
He seeks a mate to ease his pain
His song, it plays on our heart strings
As Moby Dick searches in vain

Such loneliness no whale can feign
For he’s the last of “great white” kings
Angry, no love can he attain
Casting hapless ships ‘neath waves’ rings




January 21, 2020
For Charlie Messina’s “Oh-No A Twisted Char-Lay Poetry Contest”

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John Watt February 16, 2020 at 6:58 PM So clever how you formulated the thoughts of the majestic white whale and formed them in the small space given. Excellent write, Carolyn and congrats ~ John

Gershon Wolf February 16, 2020 at 4:50 PM Yes! It's definitely time to put that whale's energy to constructive (not destructive) use! Congrats, Connie! :) Gershon

Sandra Haight February 16, 2020 at 4:13 PM A lot of emotion expressed in your well-written Lay Poem, Carolyn. We often forget that species other than humans experience loneliness too. Congrats on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Charles Messina February 16, 2020 at 1:39 PM A wonderful poem, Carolyn. Kind of sad in a way. Magnificent write...Congratulations on your win! Hugs Charlie x

Michelle Faulkner February 6, 2020 at 1:25 PM This is as deep and compelling as the sea itself - should do well in the contest! Carolyn Devonshire February 6, 2020 at 1:34 PM After reading "Frankenstein," I realized that all creatures need love. Thanks for reading, Michelle. I'll check your page.

Lindsay Laurie January 31, 2020 at 4:40 PM Hello Carolyn … such a vast area to search for too few females of his kind. The loneliness felt in your verse is touching Carolyn - Lindsay

Keith O.J. Hunt January 29, 2020 at 11:57 AM So captivating Carolyn, I love the 'sea-scent' and cries of white-love midst every word. Best of luck in the contest;-)

Mark Peterson January 28, 2020 at 7:12 PM Such a haunting, yearning verse that would cast even the most cynical soul beneath the waves to offer comfort to a lonely giant.

Howard Kerr January 28, 2020 at 10:12 AM This an evocative work. I was struck by its maritime imagery and deep emotions. Howard

Silviu Craciunas January 28, 2020 at 1:04 AM I am glad for your rich and substance-filled activity. We are waiting for you in the pages of Poesis magazine.

poemtheart poemtheart January 27, 2020 at 11:17 PM Absolutely brilliant!Clever work

Mubarika Sami January 27, 2020 at 5:55 PM Very evocative and beautiful rhythm. Well done Carolyn

Jennifer Proxenos January 25, 2020 at 5:58 AM Carolyn a magnificent write - i enjoy the intensity in your poems - good luck in the contest. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Mystic Rose Rose January 23, 2020 at 8:21 PM The last of the great white whales, wonderful write Carolyn, gl in the contest

Panagiota Romios January 23, 2020 at 2:56 PM A wonderful write, Carolyn Best wishes Panagiota Romios xx

Gershon Wolf January 22, 2020 at 8:02 PM Now that's a whale of a poem for the contest, Carolyn! (Couldn't resist). Superb entry, really. Best always, Gershon

Jack Horne January 22, 2020 at 2:12 PM love this - excellent entry for the contest xx

Paul Callus January 22, 2020 at 9:53 AM Our heart goes out to this 'male' in search of a mate, Carolyn. Loneliness can effect anybody, even those wealthy or in power. gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Quoth Theraven January 21, 2020 at 11:11 PM Carolyn, I always loved the story of that whale & Captain Ahab. -Richard

Charlie Smith January 21, 2020 at 4:41 PM Wonderful work with this form Carolyn, best wishes in the contest...

Gordon Mcconnell January 21, 2020 at 4:38 PM Great piece Carolyn, great imagery and great expression. Have a great day,Gordon

Vijay Pandit January 21, 2020 at 3:54 PM Your poem gives voice and emotions to the white whale--nicely done, Carolyn. These rhymes are not easy--especially with the syllable count. All the best.

Chris Green January 21, 2020 at 3:33 PM This was wonderful Carolyn. You did really good with this form and the poem is incredible. Best wishes in the contest

Rico Leffanta January 21, 2020 at 3:29 PM Last century, sonic booms made us tremble, but now marine life are terrorised as "Disturbing the Peace" becomes a military mission. Hawai'i was a winter haven for humpback whales, but USN sonar "tests" combined with the floating garbage, plastic waste, and discarded fishing nets have transformed whale songs into swan songs! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico Carolyn Devonshire February 2, 2020 at 2:01 PM Oh, Rico, that's horrible! As we destroy our world, we destroy mankind's future. Will look for your limericks. Hugs, Carolyn

Tom Cunningham January 21, 2020 at 2:30 PM Beautiful creatures Carolyn, would love to go whale watching. Good luck. Tom