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White Cactus Flower

It began simply with a chance encounter When you pointed to a white cactus flower, The one you loved amid bounty of colors When eye-contact held us frozen together. Soon after, you left with your aromatic air Leaving behind coyly your heart in my care, Like a treasure quite rare, I held it close Till I returned it to you with newfound love. As we continued to see sites on our tour You took my sight and held my pleasure, Accepting shyly when I offered my shoulder Greeting with a look of fascinating glamour, Giving me a hug without a physical touch Stealing my eager mind, claiming it's yours, Enlisting my gestures to say words of cheer Delighted by acclaim you wanted to hear. Exchanging hearts we parted each other, That's when you gave me your cactus flower. I hold it in your stead when memories tear up Mindful, you faded as the flower curled. March 6, 2018

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Date: 4/1/2023 2:28:00 PM
Just so beautiful…
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Date: 5/13/2022 6:43:00 AM
Love proves illusory many a time ! After the drizzle of sunshine and warmth, it is sad that their love faded out like the white cactus flower ! The way you handle emotions has a cute subtlety about it....Vijay!
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Date: 11/29/2018 11:12:00 AM
Hi Vijay, amother wonderful write from your pen my friend. You have such a skill when writing feelings and your words always paint such vivid, real pictures in the mind. The ending is sad but does not detract from the beauty of the piece, in your hands, the endong adds to the beauty of the work. An excellent write my friend. have a wonderful Thursday. Your friend aLWAYS....Mike.
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Date: 4/2/2018 4:53:00 PM
Congratulations for making the best new poem list with this poem Vijay :)
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Date: 3/9/2018 2:38:00 PM
Beautiful and yet sad, Vijay. At first I was sure that the white flower would flourish into love, but it was not to be. Regards // paul
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/9/2018 5:17:00 PM
Thank you Paul..appreciate your comments.
Date: 3/7/2018 10:08:00 PM
Vijay.....You created a mosaic of feelings dancing around two hearts searching for the illusive moment of love. A classic work!
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Date: 3/9/2018 5:17:00 PM
Thank you Chuck.
Date: 3/7/2018 11:59:00 AM
Well done Vijay. very emotional and full of love.
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Date: 3/7/2018 2:42:00 PM
Thank you Carlos..appreciate your comments.
Date: 3/7/2018 9:47:00 AM
Interesting poem Vijay. I can picture the white cactus flower and feel the feelings in this at the same time :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/7/2018 10:50:00 AM
Thank you Heidi..appreciate your kind words.
Date: 3/7/2018 7:37:00 AM
The white cactus flower of friendship, after a hug without touch. A beautiful moment.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/7/2018 10:50:00 AM
Thank you Kim..appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 7:55:00 PM
I love how the lost love always evolve in your poems as they grows towards poignant finish. Vijay your comparison towards it being a cactus flower characteristic for its beauty, yet carrying the thorn of betrayal is brilliant my dear friend. A fave ...Maria
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/7/2018 6:20:00 AM
Thank you Maria..appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 4:56:00 PM
Many a beautiful flower has thorns..as does love...Very nicely penned Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/7/2018 6:19:00 AM
Thank you Joseph..appreciate your comments.
Date: 3/6/2018 4:34:00 PM
That's a tender type of loving...for an hour of bloom... a day at most then she's gone...leaving thorns to remind you what you're choosing...All the best Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/7/2018 6:18:00 AM
Thank you Arturo..appreciate your feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 3:11:00 PM
so bittersweet this one is, Vijay. Love the white cactus flower image.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2018 3:57:00 PM
Thank you Andrea..appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 1:01:00 PM
A tender lovely piece Vijay, so peacefully done...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2018 3:11:00 PM
Thank you Charlie...appreciate your kind words.
Date: 3/6/2018 11:28:00 AM
Very poignant love found and lost poem, Vijay. Your creative penchant for transforming an ordinary act into something w/extraordinary meaning is a poetic gift God-given to you. You express your blessings well, my talented friend. Superb poetry. Love and joy always.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2018 3:11:00 PM
Many thanks Freddie..appreciate your kind feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 8:39:00 AM
Oh, my goodness--to beautiful and bittersweet, Vijay! Janice
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Date: 3/6/2018 8:56:00 AM
Appreciate your kind words..many thanks, Janice.
Date: 3/6/2018 8:26:00 AM
At least you have the cactus flower as a memory, a bittersweet poem i guess.. Nice flow as always..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2018 8:56:00 AM
Thank you Silent One--appreciate your feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 7:59:00 AM
Shared experiences cause relationships to deepen. Great imagery.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2018 8:55:00 AM
Thank you Richard--appreciate your feedback.
Date: 3/6/2018 7:50:00 AM
Vijay, nobody writes of love the way you do! I can just see this happening and feel it as well, just beautiful!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/6/2018 8:55:00 AM
Thank you Mike--appreciate your kind words.

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