Whisper of Death

My life spirals ever downward...
The grave taunts me with its laugh.
Death's bony fingers are affixed my throat
As the jester of my unmerited epitaph.

My angst at my ever-flounder appears
Well-earned and justly placed
Where the rabid minions of an avenging God
Will no doubt make bold of my disgrace.

Have I lived too long a life so plain
Where my soul was too confined
And any realistic hope of eternal bliss
Seems mere folly at this time?

To live too long is an old Man's curse
And bound to evoke some industry
Where best intentions are set adrift...
To partake sweet ecstasy.

These stains that commemorate my Earthly Sins
Are laid denuded for all to see.
I drag them unceremoniously into an afterlife
That may not wish to bolster me.

But who among us hasn't stumbled
With Death's foot ajar the door
With temptations strewn like pearled oysters
On life's repugnant shores?

The righteous path is straight and narrow
And a vehicle for all those bold and brave
But only appeared crucial and strategic as
I stand with one foot in the grave.

How happier were those days gone by
When I was young and free from vice.
If I had only maintained such vernal guileless
To insure a place in paradise.

But I have come to this conclusion
As Death's whisper slakes my soul with dread.
Too much time has been my nemesis and any
Last minute burbling is better left unsaid.

So at this hour... this late late hour...
I now confront an awful truth.
I might have had a better chance at Heaven...
Had I perished in my youth.

                       The End

Ever-flounder: A bad situation of one's own making.

*I wrote this poem from the perspective of someone who fears their sins are 
  too heavy for God to bear.
*Follow my cartoon at Webtoon Bob's Your uncle.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 11/12/2021 7:52:00 PM
Deep musings here, David. Enjoyed the read. There are no sins however, only delusion arising from head-heart misalignment with love. Once we recognise that God indwells all forms, thought of ego spawned separateness ends.
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Date: 4/30/2021 1:54:00 PM
thought provoking piece David , I always wonder how murderers can be forgiven for their sins. hugs jan xx
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/30/2021 7:56:00 PM
Thankfully that's a question we don't have to deal with. That is between them and the almighty. I wish them the best of luck. Have a great day my friend.
Date: 4/30/2021 4:01:00 AM
Only with death do our chances pass. Perhaps there is time even at death’s door as attested by the thief on the cross who crossed over to paradise. Great write, David!
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/30/2021 7:54:00 PM
IT's not over till its over. Have a great day my friend.
Date: 4/29/2021 9:05:00 PM
An excellent piece my friend. I think we all have that fear somewhere deep down and those of us who have come to know The Lord realize that without Him we are ALL doomed. I'm so thankful He paid the price for my sins. Now I must "Go and sin no more". and though we all know that no one is without sin we must try hard to not sin. Loved this. God Bless, JB
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/30/2021 7:53:00 PM
Wonderful words Judy. I hope many people get to read your words, Have a great day.
Date: 4/26/2021 7:46:00 PM
You outdid yourself with this great write. Very impressive descriptiveness and rhyming.
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/27/2021 4:43:00 PM
Thanks Robert. I do love a good rhyme. Have a great day.
Date: 4/25/2021 7:40:00 AM
Ha ha, now ain’t that the truth. Well at least when you arrive, you will have plenty to talk about.
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/25/2021 12:11:00 PM
I'm amazed by our society where we hide our sins from each other. I think we would all be better at forgiveness if we didn't all pretend to be perfect. Have a great day my friend.
Date: 4/25/2021 7:22:00 AM
wow, such a thought provoking write here
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/25/2021 12:08:00 PM
Thanks Jack. I think this poem echos how many people feel. Have a great day.
Date: 4/24/2021 1:49:00 PM
No doubt about it. You are a fantastic and serious thinker and Poet, David. Like Gershon, have to FAVE This one. Aging for some, brings gratitude and humility. God died for Sinners, not the Perfect. Those who think they know it all.)) They think they are gods. When one is way older, they don't question God and his forgiveness. Pangie xx
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/24/2021 3:45:00 PM
The world could use a good dose of humility. Humility and forgiveness would solve a lot of problems. Far too often these days... we are told not to question certain things. A sure sign someone is up to no good. Have a great day.
Date: 4/22/2021 8:04:00 PM
I agree with Andrea... I don't even want to think of being beyond redemption... too sad... Horrifying actually. God bless you always. Love, Gina
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/24/2021 3:42:00 PM
I was born in Regina, Saskatchewan. You're right. The idea of being beyond redemption is a tough road to hoe. Have a great day.
Date: 4/18/2021 8:46:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this masterfully written poem, David. It's in my faves. Blessings, Evelyn
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/24/2021 3:40:00 PM
Thanks Judy. If death was a bad thing... everyone wouldn't do it. Have a great day.
Date: 4/18/2021 10:31:00 AM
I am glad this is from another perspective, not your own. It's really well written. I think the person would have to have some pretty horrible things to be feeling so beyond redemption. Anyway, GREAT write.
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/18/2021 6:25:00 PM
I think every once in a while we all feel we may be beyond redemption. But thankfully...we know that is not true. Have a great day my friend.
Date: 4/15/2021 3:56:00 PM
Your steely honesty, with a dollop of humor poking fun at yourself, is a joy to read. I appreciate reading about such a serious subject, and coming away with a feeling of 'Yup, David's got that about right.' A FAVE for me, my friend. ~ Stay Above Ground, Please
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 4/17/2021 8:28:00 PM
I was wondering when I'd that wonderful quote again?! What?! lol. Now I gotta close with 'Don't live easy, my friend. :) gw
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David Mchattie
Date: 4/16/2021 6:32:00 PM
As they say, 'Dying is easy... comedy is hard.' Stay frosty my friend.
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