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Whisper

come dream the moonlit night, light enchanting softly, belfry tolls time between, so keen the heart awakes, forsakes its own calling, falling for sirens, still, she whispers to my soul, bed, no solace gives, sieves of time and soul, coal, never to be gem, hem me in with your soot, put value underground, not a sound survives, yet, she whispers to my soul, fettered, all but spirit, tear writ confessions speak, weak, too little too late, hate all that I’ve become, now numb sense not to feel, kneel before You, rent, while she whispers to me soul, prone to this walking death, breathe of life be my guide, wide eventide's wings spread, wed harmony with might, light reflected so fair, "wear your love with grace", this she whispers to my soul

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 1/3/2019 2:47:00 AM
You've captured a great juxtaposition of light and dark, it's oddly intense and charming at the same time. Excellent write.
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Luke Hobbs
Date: 1/17/2019 1:35:00 AM
Lawrence, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. At the time it was a breakthrough for me in that it was a sentiment I had been trying to get on paper for a while.
Date: 1/2/2019 10:07:00 PM
YEAAAY! Love the rhyme scheme! So original, and full of feeling! Excellent, sir!
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Luke Hobbs
Date: 1/17/2019 1:42:00 AM
Thank you, Andrew. The rhyme scheme just kept coming into my mind and wouldn't be ignored so I tried to make it work for whole thing. After trying it, I actually prefer this scheme to the line end only scheme.

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