Where the Woods Open

There's a path I always take
down to the river where the woods
are dressed down open
The light of the sky
doesn't shine in your eyes
but leads the way to redemption
 
I like to stand there for a moment
on the shortcut created by troubled feet
woven with wilderness bliss
and cigarettes butts
It's a path that never sleeps
 
I see the same semi-blind vision
of the river every time
I hear baby boat horns blaring in the distance
and floating out of view
I walk to the rhythm of the trees
the faint sound of Wild Thing
playing in the car
I carry a bent black rod
with a tangled neon line
and a mud-covered box of rusty hooks
and flaming red bobbers
I wear my T-Shirt that says Iron City Beer
that's cut off at the belly
or sometimes my other one
that says Just Do It
with shredded denim shorts
that ride my buttocks
 
After a few seconds of inhaling
and exhaling an indecision
I do what most fishermen do
with only my thoughts to keep me company
I find a clean rock
and cast with desperation
The woods close
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Hodges Avatar
February 12, 2020 at 5:47 PM
I really love this poem. It's going to my favorites list!
Callus Avatar
February 7, 2020 at 2:40 PM
Beautiful, Victoria! You took me along with you down the path, to the wood (where the light of the sky doesn't shine in your eyes but leads the way to redemption!!) and river. Casting rusty hooks with desperation makes me think of a person still trying to resolve old problems/doubts. ~ Regards // paul
Hunter Avatar
February 9, 2020 at 1:13 PM
Wow! You even opened my eyes to my own poem, in a new way. I would love to hear you feedback on some of my work in progress. I will check out some of your work to. Thank you for the feedback, and reading my work!
Labyrinth Avatar
January 26, 2020 at 6:19 AM
Brilliant writing at its best. But you know that. I was transported out of my room into your story, walking with you down to that clean rock with you, watching you as you cast with desperation. A rather ominous feeling stays with me, what were you leaving behind to seek redemption? The hook, for me, is wanting to learn about the story that precedes this one....your Youtube video on "The Darkside of The Writing World" is informative. I must watch your others. You are a writer to follow. Leanne
Hunter Avatar
January 26, 2020 at 12:05 PM
Thank you very much! It means a lot to me to hear that my work is moving people. Based on your comment, I really think you would like my video on my YouTube that teaches Hemingway's Iceberg method. Every week I upload videos on channel, about writing. I uploaded one today teaching how to create your writing voice ??. I will check out your work to ??
poemtheart Avatar
January 24, 2020 at 12:45 AM
This poetry is magnificent..! thanks for sharing.. :) well Could I request you to visit my website & read my poem? thank you..
Hunter Avatar
January 24, 2020 at 6:27 AM
Thank you very much! I have a Youtube channel that teaches writing:0). I would love to read your poem, and give feedback. You are welcomed to give feedback on any poems I post. Thank you again, you motivate me to write more. I would love your feedback on a certain piece, I have been writing.
Bangalee Avatar
January 23, 2020 at 1:03 AM
beautiful writing; well imaginative
Hunter Avatar
January 24, 2020 at 6:29 AM
thank you very much!
Cunningham Avatar
January 19, 2020 at 8:56 AM
Loved the imagery in your verse Victoria, welcome to poetry soup. Tom
Hunter Avatar
January 26, 2020 at 4:59 PM
Thanks Tom. I took a while to post, since I am so backed up with mastering some work:0)
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