Where Pomegranates Grow

Outside the city where the pomegranates grow

I vainly seek from the dogged strains of time, 

a moment to hide in, under limbs hanging low,

and by chance, or the devil’s cunning, find

courage, as welling seeds inward and bound,

but bleeding, weeping their intoxicating blood;

ever so rarely, under Heaven’s smile found,

possessed by low creatures, a-wallow in mud.

Then in such possession, enveloped so neatly

as roaring winds and biting sands gnash the air; 

with confident eyes, focus intently and sweetly

on the blossoms, those blossoms, everywhere.
     
     The whisper of death rustles limbs hanging low

     outside the city where the pomegranates grow.

4/30/16
For Contest: First Line Prompt
Hosted by: Julia Ward

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 2/27/2017 12:14:00 AM
Love it. We had a pomegranate tree in our back yard. It got hugh you could hide behind it. I still love them today .
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Date: 5/28/2016 1:28:00 PM
Nicely done. I fear I'm not going to place now, this is very very good. Good luck. Nice work.
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Date: 5/3/2016 10:24:00 AM
I will be very surprised if this doesn't rank at top of the list! The poignant melancholy doesn't have to shout, to make one feel somber, and want to linger here with memory. Beautifully done!
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Date: 5/3/2016 4:40:00 PM
Thanks Carrie. I appreciate the encouragement and kind words. -G
Date: 5/2/2016 2:06:00 PM
Hey! First time I've given a seven BEFORE I made comment. Love the metaphor here, beautiful rhyme, interesting Maths, the bitter/sweet comparison of life and death. The symbol of the Pomegranates is quite interesting and a vital life force! Imagery, rhyme, stress, metaphor, symbolism, all painted in words CERTAINLY works here. Love it!
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Date: 5/2/2016 6:18:00 PM
Thank you for the encouraging feedback. I appreciate that you took the time to read and comment. -G
Date: 5/2/2016 8:01:00 AM
This is quite lovely in a sad kinda way.
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Date: 5/2/2016 6:20:00 PM
Isn't funny how we can sometimes feel so alone, and maybe even afraid, despite beautiful surroundings?
Date: 5/1/2016 5:46:00 AM
Well, our pomegranates are more bush like instead of tree for some reason..The tiny limbs always seem too delicate to hold those heavy pomegranates but they always do..Enjoyed reading your work..Reads like a winner to me..Great contest..Thanks for stopping by my page..Sara
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Date: 5/2/2016 6:22:00 PM
Thanks for taking the time to stop by and comment. I've personally never even seen a pomegranate (bush?). But I googled them, and they do have very vibrant blossoms.
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