Jan Allison Poet Couplet

Where Frozen Embers Still Burn

My heart is frozen back in time
Looking back to when you were mine

Oh how our love and passion burned
You stole my heart, yet now I’m spurned

I still don’t know where I went wrong
My body aches - for you I still long

You drove an ice pick into my heart
Twisted it round and tore me apart

You ripped apart my very soul
I’m empty now, when once was whole

Your words were music to my ears
I’m left in silence with my deepest fears

If we could have another chance
Would I take you back for sweet romance?

I look at our photos and still I yearn
For you the frozen embers still burn


08~18~14

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Constance La France May 14, 2016 at 1:58 PM Congratulations on your wonderful placement with this beautiful write Jan Allison May 22, 2016 at 4:09 PM Thanks so much Constance:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath May 13, 2016 at 9:26 PM Congrats on your great win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl Jan Allison May 14, 2016 at 12:28 PM Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Palli May 13, 2016 at 11:49 AM Can feel the heartache! Congrats! Jan Allison May 14, 2016 at 12:29 PM Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Francis J Grasso May 13, 2016 at 11:36 AM Well done Jan, congratulations! ...Fran Jan Allison May 14, 2016 at 12:29 PM Thanks Francis:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell May 13, 2016 at 11:13 AM very touching congrats x stephen Jan Allison May 14, 2016 at 12:30 PM Thanks Stephen:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars May 13, 2016 at 10:47 AM oh Jan, I fell in love with this reading the first line...Thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your top win! :)-luloo Jan Allison May 14, 2016 at 12:28 PM Thanks Luloo its a pretty early write for me - am so glad to get the chance to showcase it once again:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 22, 2014 at 3:59 AM Indeed so soft.. Can't relate to this for how many times my heart broken but still that love in me still burns that I still can not hate.. Jan Allison August 22, 2014 at 4:32 AM I'm glad its a fictitious write Olive. In reality I could never give a second chance to a person if he did this to my heart:-( Hugs Jan xx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 22, 2014 at 4:00 AM 2 3 4,5 are my faves..:)so strong lines of hurt and pain..

Debra Squyres August 20, 2014 at 12:03 PM Hi Jan, nice to meet you !! Your poem took me through a range of emotions, each with a depth of it's own. Best of luck in the contest !!! Thanks, too, for dropping by my page. It's been a while since I've posted on the Soup... and even longer since I've tried a contest. lol This one at least had my mind moving towards poet verse again. Jan Allison August 20, 2014 at 12:07 PM Lovely to meet you too Debra. I am a relative newbie to poetry only been here since February - boy it has changed my life for the better! Hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 19, 2014 at 8:54 AM Superb write Jan ! Wish u luck my friend! Jan Allison August 19, 2014 at 8:56 AM Thank you so much for you continued support Dr Sharma:-) I do appreciate your comments:-) Hugs jan xxx

Carolyn Devonshire August 19, 2014 at 2:12 AM Dear Jan, I can relate to the "emptiness" you describe in your heart. If someone had stolen my zest for life, I doubt I would take him back. Been there and it never worked out. Excellent entry for Gail's contest. Always wishing you success, my friend. Love, Carolyn Jan Allison August 19, 2014 at 3:10 AM Thanks Carolyn - guess If i'd be hurt that bad i wouldn't.. but in poetry land anything can happen:-) Hugs jan xxx

Ilene Bauer August 18, 2014 at 9:20 PM great poem, jan! best of luck in the contest... Jan Allison August 19, 2014 at 3:09 AM Thanks Ilene:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Vera Duggan August 18, 2014 at 7:04 PM Jan what a lovely easy to read poem, so romantic, love the last two lines frozen embers burn, great stuff, take care my dear friend................Vera.......... Jan Allison August 19, 2014 at 3:08 AM Many thanks for the lovely comment and its was GREAT to meet your daughter - what a talented family!!! Hugs jan xxx Vera Duggan August 18, 2014 at 7:05 PM By the way good luck in the contest, it deserves a win.

Roxie Perry August 18, 2014 at 7:02 PM Great poem! Loved it! Good luck! Jan Allison August 19, 2014 at 3:08 AM thanks for dropping by Roxie:-) Hugs jan xx

Earl Schumacker August 18, 2014 at 4:40 PM Hi Jan. This is sweet, romantic, sad and charming. Keep up the good work and I wish you good luck in the contest. Earl Jan Allison August 18, 2014 at 4:44 PM Thanks for the lovely comment Earl:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Peter Dome August 18, 2014 at 4:37 PM Oh dear, this is sad I hope it's not true dearheart. Love doesn't always run smooth. another word for insanity. one moment your flying above the clouds, the next shot to the ground with a bump. A really well written emotional piece. talented girl you. take care Pete. Jan Allison August 18, 2014 at 4:43 PM Thanks peter - its just a poem from my imagination - a bit out of my comfort zone so i'm pleased with the end result:-) Hugs Jan xxxx

Frederic Parker August 18, 2014 at 2:19 PM felt the pain in this one and the couplet line you drove an ice pick into my heart was a very chilling line..strong and visual ..you'll do well in this contest Jan Allison August 18, 2014 at 2:21 PM Thanks Frederic it's not my usual style so i thought I'd give it a go:-) Your poem is awesome!!! hugs jan xxx

Nette Onclaud August 18, 2014 at 2:12 PM you drew me in, jan... sullen and splendid; wow.. huggs Jan Allison August 18, 2014 at 2:20 PM Thanks Nette its a bit out of my comfort zone but i thought i would give it a go:-) Hugs Jan xxx

J. R. Corbin August 18, 2014 at 11:47 AM So sad how sweet love comes and goes, Jan. It can make your heart ache. Very soulful write. Jim Jan Allison August 18, 2014 at 11:50 AM Thanks J R - its a bit out of my comfort zone but I thought I would give it a try:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith August 18, 2014 at 11:46 AM Wow Jan very powerful.... Love it hugs Tim Jan Allison August 18, 2014 at 11:49 AM Your romantic writes are having an effect on me Tim - thank you - you inspire me :-) Hugs jan xxx