John Hamilton Poet Rhyme

Where Echoes Hide

Negativity echoes in the distressed mind
Crashing like Tsunami waves with beatings well timed

I am no good...                                I am no good...

I am no good...                                I am no good...

Words echo in my mind!                   Words echo in my mind!

Negativity echoes in the distressed mind
Crashing like Tsunami waves with beatings well timed

I am no good...                                I am no good...

I am no good...                                I am no good...

No inner peace can I find.                 No inner peace can I find.

Empty recesses , amplify  tunes of abuse
Allowing discordant echoes in a mind obtuse.

What's wrong with you?                    What's wrong with you?

What's wrong with you?                    What's wrong with you?

I ask myself                                     I ask myself

I ask myself                                     I ask myself

Empty recesses , amplify tunes of abuse
Discordant  exhalations in a mind obtuse.

Words echo in my mind                    Words echo in my mind

Words echo in my mind                    Words echo in my mind


Negativity echoes in the distressed mind
Crashing like Tsunami waves with beatings well timed
Empty recesses, amplify  tunes of abuse
Discordant exhalations of a mind obtuse.

Change the channel! Do it now! Before you die inside!
Don't allow negativity to grow in the hollows of your mind
because...
That's the place where malevolent echoes hide.


December 09,2015

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Leroy Max January 23, 2016 at 12:04 PM John, I'm posting my Poem inspired by Where Echo's Hide. The rural way.

Poet Destroyer A December 22, 2015 at 3:53 PM awesome win. John Hamilton December 22, 2015 at 10:18 PM Thanks Linda

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 22, 2015 at 1:51 AM Brilliant take John.. congrats on great win! John Hamilton December 22, 2015 at 10:16 PM Thanks Dr always appreciated

Skat A December 21, 2015 at 9:28 PM John, Nice win. SKAT John Hamilton December 21, 2015 at 10:20 PM Thanks SKAT so kind your comments always.

Michael Tor December 21, 2015 at 8:15 PM Very true John congratulations on your win John Hamilton December 21, 2015 at 10:20 PM Thanks Michael very much appreciated.

John Lawless December 21, 2015 at 5:42 PM John, the repetitions of the echoes and the follow up in the echoing stanza sealed it ....Thanks for participating in the contest. John Hamilton December 21, 2015 at 10:19 PM Thanks John I really appreciate that you liked it. I thought it was a little too much echo but I guess not! Was Ian's idea to intersperse echo's inside the poem, so he gets credit too!

Sandra Haight December 11, 2015 at 1:12 PM Excellent take on the theme, John. Words of wisdom we can all take to heart. All the best for the contest. Sandra John Hamilton December 11, 2015 at 5:35 PM Thanks Sandra, always appreciate your kind visits and comments.

John Hamilton December 10, 2015 at 8:47 AM Hi Ian Thanks for your visit and comment, I think you have a good idea about having the echo hide in the text of the poem, that's brilliant. I'll see if there is time to make an adjustment. Thanks for your critique very much appreciated.