When You'Re With Me

To the tune of “ Sixteen Going on Seventeen 
from “The Sound of Music”



When you’re with me,
                I can feel everything, a body’s meant to feel
Butterfly kisses, tell me what this is
                                           My heart is yours to steal

When you’re with me.
               I can do anything, climbing the highest peak
Your love updates me, invigorates me
                                                So I can hardly speak 

What do I care, if others say
                                  that ours is puppy love
They wouldn’t dare, if they could play
                             just what I’m dreaming of

When I’m with you,
          We can do anything, no one can force our hand
Suitors may show up, trying to blow up
                                          They’ll never understand

When you’re with me,
              I can see everything, that there is left to see
There's just one thing, just one undone thing
                                               Seeing you marry me
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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George Avatar
November 29, 2021 at 7:23 AM
Quite lyrical ! Goes well with the tune. Though the love may be teased as 'puppy love' by elders what does a boy of his late teens care... a dare devil who is up to anything!
Gentile Avatar
November 29, 2021 at 7:38 AM
Thanks so much Valsa !!
Chapin Avatar
November 19, 2021 at 12:44 PM
Awww, that is super sweet. Good job.
Gentile Avatar
November 19, 2021 at 1:06 PM
Thanks so much Jayme !!
Rodrigues Avatar
November 19, 2021 at 5:22 AM
Mike, this sings with true romance. Hopefully she would decide that he was the one too. My parents had a love like this. My dead misses mom so. <3
Gentile Avatar
November 19, 2021 at 5:40 AM
That's so hard to live with , I hope they will be reunited some day! Thanks Kim!!
Nicole Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 12:00 PM
"Butterfly kisses, just what I’m dreaming of" And lips touch like a whisper, oh, what bliss. This is so beautiful and romantic. There's nothing wrong with *Puppy Love*. It is soooo sweet. Your thoughts bring a smile. :) Brandy
Gentile Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 1:17 PM
I’m so glad you liked it, thanks Brandy xxoo
Andresen Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 11:59 AM
- This was a beautiful song ... so loving <3 - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Gentile Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 1:17 PM
Thanks so much Anne-Lise xxoo
Allison Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 11:41 AM
absolutely precious piece Mike, it fits the music so well, love the sound of music, wont be long before its on the tv again as it always is at Christmas:-) hugs jan xx
Allison Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 5:00 PM
so glad to be back reading your lovely lines xx
Gentile Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 1:16 PM
So happy to see you back!!! Thanks Jan xxoo
Cunningham Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 7:14 AM
You got me singing it now Mike. Perfect lyrics. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
Gentile Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 7:22 AM
Thanks so much Tom!!
Sands Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 6:19 AM
Great one Mike! Sweet. Happy Thursday :)
Gentile Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 7:21 AM
Thanks Heidi, Happy Thursday xxoo
Pandit Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 6:06 AM
Enjoyed the tune reminiscing in youth. Beautiful lyrics, Mike. Win BIG.
Gentile Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 7:21 AM
Thanks so much Vijay!!
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