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When Yesterday's Song Forfeited Rhythm

When yesterday’s song forfeited rhythm And past surrendered to dreams undone, Spontaneous clamor of poignant echoes Shattered her image in saddened mirror Disillusioned by her heart’s revelation. Merely clinging to clutches of hope In tomorrow’s beats yesteryears roared Willing to patronize fixation of love, Though it was just an optical illusion In lovelorn expanse of parched desert. In intrigue of his chivalry she implored When his seasons evoked spring blossoms And horizons charmed sunny summers— Until she realized how spurious glitter Sparkles from the heart of faux gemstones. Dismayed, she exits at portal to nowhere Forced to navigate in sea of despair When he parted for a new destination. Expansive is the realm of her new world Where mixed emotions anxiously ponder, Yearning tangible results from intangible future Holding fate accountable to promises of yore. January 28, 2020 Placed 2nd: Eight word challenge 1, 2020 poetry contest Sponsor: John Hamilton Required words are used in following order: spontaneous, revelation, patronize, fixation, intrigue, portal, navigate, tangible HM: Strand choice 12 contest by Brian Strand

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 10/31/2020 2:39:00 PM

A very emotional poem, Vijay. I don't think fate will give her want she wants.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 2/1/2020 4:36:00 PM

Really wonderful write, Vijay:-) Congrats!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2020 8:18:00 AM

Much appreciate Edward--many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/1/2020 3:37:00 PM

Loved this imagery: Until she realized how spurious glitter/Sparkles from the heart of faux gemstones./Congrat, Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/1/2020 4:16:00 PM

Much appreciate Kim--many many thanks.

Brenda Chiri

Date: 1/31/2020 2:44:00 PM

Vijay congrats on your win!:)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 3:17:00 PM

Thank you Brenda--much appreciate.

John Hamilton

Date: 1/31/2020 12:40:00 PM

Another masterful write Vijay, congrats on another win in my eight word challenge, was exactly what I was hoping for!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 3:16:00 PM

Much appreciate John--thanks for holding the contests--I know it's not easy.

Hello There

Date: 1/30/2020 11:53:00 PM

This is a bit heartwrenching, my friend. In the end, fate must be held accountable... And she must hold on to hope. Beautifully executed ~ a fave.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 7:40:00 AM

She is hoping fate will deliver. Much appreciate my friend your lovely comments--many thanks, HT. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Haven't seen your poems in while.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 1/30/2020 10:19:00 PM

Sometimes, moments aren't what they seem. "mixed emotions anxiously ponder" There is always Hope. You paint such vivid images with your words. Highs and lows through out. Your thoughts always leave me in awe. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 7:38:00 AM

Much appreciate Brandy--always a pleasure to read your comments--many many thanks.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 1/30/2020 2:52:00 AM

Your harmonious craft of poetic words compose their very rhythm and music of Hope.. The last stanza is the culmination of beauty a desperate soul should reach.. renewal and growth with a faith in a promising time to come.. Your have wonderfully designed your poem, dear Vijay! Worthy of many a read and win! The best of luck in the contest.. my deepest regards and blessings.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/30/2020 8:33:00 AM

It is a pleasure to read your kind remarks to start my day. Always appreciate the time you take to spread goodwill on Soup. Many thanks, Besma. Regards.

Pashang Salehi

Date: 1/30/2020 1:18:00 AM

I enjoyed your journey through time and the messages within.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/30/2020 8:30:00 AM

Thank you Pashang--much appreciate.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/29/2020 3:58:00 PM

Vijay, this is a fave for me as I am "clutching to hope" that yesterday's losses will still allow me to find love in the future. You did a great job using the special words, Vijay. John is sure to love this too! Best wishes for success, Carolyn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/30/2020 8:29:00 AM

My very best to you Carolyn--may your wishes come true my friend, and hopes become reality! Always a delight to read your feedback--much appreciate--many many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/28/2020 11:14:00 PM

You did brilliantly with the eight words required in this competition Vijay. I wish you all the best in the contest, not that you need it, because I think it will win! Blessings my friend, Jennifer.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/29/2020 7:46:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer--much appreciate.