When Yesterday's Song Forfeited Rhythm

When yesterday’s song forfeited rhythm
And past surrendered to dreams undone,

Spontaneous clamor of poignant echoes
Shattered her image in saddened mirror
Disillusioned by her heart’s revelation.

Merely clinging to clutches of hope
In tomorrow’s beats yesteryears roared
Willing to patronize fixation of love,

Though it was just an optical illusion
In lovelorn expanse of parched desert.

In intrigue of his chivalry she implored
When his seasons evoked spring blossoms
And horizons charmed sunny summers—

Until she realized how spurious glitter
Sparkles from the heart of faux gemstones.

Dismayed, she exits at portal to nowhere
Forced to navigate in sea of despair
When he parted for a new destination.

Expansive is the realm of her new world
Where mixed emotions anxiously ponder,
Yearning tangible results from intangible future
Holding fate accountable to promises of yore.

January 28, 2020
Placed 2nd: Eight word challenge 1, 2020 poetry contest
Sponsor: John Hamilton
Required words are used in following order:
spontaneous, revelation, patronize, fixation,
intrigue, portal, navigate, tangible
HM: Strand choice 12 contest by Brian Strand

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 10/31/2020 2:39:00 PM
A very emotional poem, Vijay. I don't think fate will give her want she wants.
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Date: 2/1/2020 4:36:00 PM
Really wonderful write, Vijay:-) Congrats!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 2/2/2020 8:18:00 AM
Much appreciate Edward--many thanks.
Date: 2/1/2020 3:37:00 PM
Loved this imagery: Until she realized how spurious glitter/Sparkles from the heart of faux gemstones./Congrat, Vijay!
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Date: 2/1/2020 4:16:00 PM
Much appreciate Kim--many many thanks.
Date: 1/31/2020 2:44:00 PM
Vijay congrats on your win!:)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 3:17:00 PM
Thank you Brenda--much appreciate.
Date: 1/31/2020 12:40:00 PM
Another masterful write Vijay, congrats on another win in my eight word challenge, was exactly what I was hoping for!
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Date: 1/31/2020 3:16:00 PM
Much appreciate John--thanks for holding the contests--I know it's not easy.
Date: 1/30/2020 11:53:00 PM
This is a bit heartwrenching, my friend. In the end, fate must be held accountable... And she must hold on to hope. Beautifully executed ~ a fave.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/31/2020 7:40:00 AM
She is hoping fate will deliver. Much appreciate my friend your lovely comments--many thanks, HT. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Haven't seen your poems in while.
Date: 1/30/2020 10:19:00 PM
Sometimes, moments aren't what they seem. "mixed emotions anxiously ponder" There is always Hope. You paint such vivid images with your words. Highs and lows through out. Your thoughts always leave me in awe. ~ Brandy
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Date: 1/31/2020 7:38:00 AM
Much appreciate Brandy--always a pleasure to read your comments--many many thanks.
Date: 1/30/2020 2:52:00 AM
Your harmonious craft of poetic words compose their very rhythm and music of Hope.. The last stanza is the culmination of beauty a desperate soul should reach.. renewal and growth with a faith in a promising time to come.. Your have wonderfully designed your poem, dear Vijay! Worthy of many a read and win! The best of luck in the contest.. my deepest regards and blessings.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/30/2020 8:33:00 AM
It is a pleasure to read your kind remarks to start my day. Always appreciate the time you take to spread goodwill on Soup. Many thanks, Besma. Regards.
Date: 1/30/2020 1:18:00 AM
I enjoyed your journey through time and the messages within.
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Date: 1/30/2020 8:30:00 AM
Thank you Pashang--much appreciate.
Date: 1/29/2020 3:58:00 PM
Vijay, this is a fave for me as I am "clutching to hope" that yesterday's losses will still allow me to find love in the future. You did a great job using the special words, Vijay. John is sure to love this too! Best wishes for success, Carolyn
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/30/2020 8:29:00 AM
My very best to you Carolyn--may your wishes come true my friend, and hopes become reality! Always a delight to read your feedback--much appreciate--many many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Date: 1/28/2020 11:14:00 PM
You did brilliantly with the eight words required in this competition Vijay. I wish you all the best in the contest, not that you need it, because I think it will win! Blessings my friend, Jennifer.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/29/2020 7:46:00 AM
Thank you Jennifer--much appreciate.
Date: 1/28/2020 4:34:00 PM
Perfect verse with the use of all 8 words, Vijay, good luck in the contest. Eve
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Date: 1/28/2020 4:46:00 PM
Much appreciate your kind feedback, Eve--many many thanks.
Date: 1/28/2020 10:49:00 AM
You make it look quite easy using the allocated words Vijay, well composed with great imagery. Good luck. Tom
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Date: 1/28/2020 4:46:00 PM
So very kind of you, Tom--much appreciate--many many thanks.
Date: 1/28/2020 10:49:00 AM
Hope her new destination bring new celebrations...a fresh perspective helps...Nice one Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2020 4:45:00 PM
Honored by your visit and kind remarks, Arturo--much appreciate--many thanks.
Date: 1/28/2020 9:48:00 AM
forfeited rhythm..poignant echoes..saddened mirror...clutches of hope..parched desert..I love them all..Humbly I'm learning to read poetry..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2020 4:43:00 PM
So appreciate your kind remarks, Jenish--many many thanks.
Date: 1/28/2020 8:41:00 AM
Masterfully done my friend, Vijay! Impressive results! Outstanding imagery! Good luck !
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 1/28/2020 4:42:00 PM
So kind of you my friend--much appreciate your comments--many thanks.
Date: 1/28/2020 8:11:00 AM
so beautiful even with its sad ending... you incorporated these words brilliantly in this write Vijay... wonderful penning :) hugs
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Date: 1/28/2020 4:41:00 PM
Much appreciate Sandy, your cheerful comments--many thanks, my friend.
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