Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

When Yesterday's Song Forfeited Rhythm

When yesterday’s song forfeited rhythm
And past surrendered to dreams undone,

Spontaneous clamor of poignant echoes
Shattered her image in saddened mirror
Disillusioned by her heart’s revelation.

Merely clinging to clutches of hope
In tomorrow’s beats yesteryears roared
Willing to patronize fixation of love,

Though it was just an optical illusion
In lovelorn expanse of parched desert.

In intrigue of his chivalry she implored
When his seasons evoked spring blossoms
And horizons charmed sunny summers—

Until she realized how spurious glitter
Sparkles from the heart of faux gemstones.

Dismayed, she exits at portal to nowhere
Forced to navigate in sea of despair
When he parted for a new destination.

Expansive is the realm of her new world
Where mixed emotions anxiously ponder,
Yearning tangible results from intangible future
Holding fate accountable to promises of yore.

January 28, 2020
Placed 2nd: Eight word challenge 1, 2020 poetry contest
Sponsor: John Hamilton
Required words are used in following order:
spontaneous, revelation, patronize, fixation,
intrigue, portal, navigate, tangible
HM: Strand choice 12 contest by Brian Strand

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Angela Crabtree October 31, 2020 at 2:39 PM A very emotional poem, Vijay. I don't think fate will give her want she wants.

Edward Ibeh February 1, 2020 at 4:36 PM Really wonderful write, Vijay:-) Congrats! Vijay Pandit February 2, 2020 at 8:18 AM Much appreciate Edward--many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues February 1, 2020 at 3:37 PM Loved this imagery: Until she realized how spurious glitter/Sparkles from the heart of faux gemstones./Congrat, Vijay! Vijay Pandit February 1, 2020 at 4:16 PM Much appreciate Kim--many many thanks.

Brenda Chiri January 31, 2020 at 2:44 PM Vijay congrats on your win!:) Vijay Pandit January 31, 2020 at 3:17 PM Thank you Brenda--much appreciate.

John Hamilton January 31, 2020 at 12:40 PM Another masterful write Vijay, congrats on another win in my eight word challenge, was exactly what I was hoping for! Vijay Pandit January 31, 2020 at 3:16 PM Much appreciate John--thanks for holding the contests--I know it's not easy.

Hello There January 30, 2020 at 11:53 PM This is a bit heartwrenching, my friend. In the end, fate must be held accountable... And she must hold on to hope. Beautifully executed ~ a fave. Vijay Pandit January 31, 2020 at 7:40 AM She is hoping fate will deliver. Much appreciate my friend your lovely comments--many thanks, HT. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Haven't seen your poems in while.

Brandy Nicole January 30, 2020 at 10:19 PM Sometimes, moments aren't what they seem. "mixed emotions anxiously ponder" There is always Hope. You paint such vivid images with your words. Highs and lows through out. Your thoughts always leave me in awe. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit January 31, 2020 at 7:38 AM Much appreciate Brandy--always a pleasure to read your comments--many many thanks.

Besma Riabi Dziri January 30, 2020 at 2:52 AM Your harmonious craft of poetic words compose their very rhythm and music of Hope.. The last stanza is the culmination of beauty a desperate soul should reach.. renewal and growth with a faith in a promising time to come.. Your have wonderfully designed your poem, dear Vijay! Worthy of many a read and win! The best of luck in the contest.. my deepest regards and blessings. Vijay Pandit January 30, 2020 at 8:33 AM It is a pleasure to read your kind remarks to start my day. Always appreciate the time you take to spread goodwill on Soup. Many thanks, Besma. Regards.

Pashang Salehi January 30, 2020 at 1:18 AM I enjoyed your journey through time and the messages within. Vijay Pandit January 30, 2020 at 8:30 AM Thank you Pashang--much appreciate.

Carolyn Devonshire January 29, 2020 at 3:58 PM Vijay, this is a fave for me as I am "clutching to hope" that yesterday's losses will still allow me to find love in the future. You did a great job using the special words, Vijay. John is sure to love this too! Best wishes for success, Carolyn Vijay Pandit January 30, 2020 at 8:29 AM My very best to you Carolyn--may your wishes come true my friend, and hopes become reality! Always a delight to read your feedback--much appreciate--many many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.

Jennifer Proxenos January 28, 2020 at 11:14 PM You did brilliantly with the eight words required in this competition Vijay. I wish you all the best in the contest, not that you need it, because I think it will win! Blessings my friend, Jennifer. Vijay Pandit January 29, 2020 at 7:46 AM Thank you Jennifer--much appreciate.

Eve Roper January 28, 2020 at 4:34 PM Perfect verse with the use of all 8 words, Vijay, good luck in the contest. Eve Vijay Pandit January 28, 2020 at 4:46 PM Much appreciate your kind feedback, Eve--many many thanks.

Arturo Michael January 28, 2020 at 10:49 AM Hope her new destination bring new celebrations...a fresh perspective helps...Nice one Vijay Vijay Pandit January 28, 2020 at 4:45 PM Honored by your visit and kind remarks, Arturo--much appreciate--many thanks.

Tom Cunningham January 28, 2020 at 10:49 AM You make it look quite easy using the allocated words Vijay, well composed with great imagery. Good luck. Tom Vijay Pandit January 28, 2020 at 4:46 PM So very kind of you, Tom--much appreciate--many many thanks.

Jenish Somadas January 28, 2020 at 9:48 AM forfeited rhythm..poignant echoes..saddened mirror...clutches of hope..parched desert..I love them all..Humbly I'm learning to read poetry.. Vijay Pandit January 28, 2020 at 4:43 PM So appreciate your kind remarks, Jenish--many many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis January 28, 2020 at 8:41 AM Masterfully done my friend, Vijay! Impressive results! Outstanding imagery! Good luck ! Vijay Pandit January 28, 2020 at 4:42 PM So kind of you my friend--much appreciate your comments--many thanks.

Sandra Adams January 28, 2020 at 8:11 AM so beautiful even with its sad ending... you incorporated these words brilliantly in this write Vijay... wonderful penning :) hugs Vijay Pandit January 28, 2020 at 4:41 PM Much appreciate Sandy, your cheerful comments--many thanks, my friend.