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When We Hugged.

The moon gazed.
The stars ripened,
and immortal whispers charmed the forest
with her tale,
........when we hugged.

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Michelle Phaneuf

Date: 6/17/2009 4:49:00 PM

i felt a chill when i read the first sentence! awesome! keep up the good work!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/20/2009 4:54:00 PM

WHEN WE HUGGED,HUG THE POETRY EVERYDAY,YOU ARE ANATURAL,GLAD TO HAVE YOU ON POETRY SOUPAGAIN,IM WAITING TO READ.....:-) CHARMAINE

Barbara Washington

Date: 3/9/2009 5:13:00 PM

beautiful poem, thanks for commenting on my spring power poem

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/11/2009 6:50:00 AM

K K please put your wonderful perspective to work on a poem for my Chair Tales contest. Hug a chair today LOL

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 1/29/2009 4:55:00 PM

I love Debs idea..this would make a wonderful tanka. good work. BG

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/29/2009 2:51:00 PM

They Know Not is simply about all the gifts God has given us and that we are blinded by plenty. Even with all over senses sight, sound, taaste touch, we do not see? Does that make sense to you?

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/29/2009 2:32:00 PM

I'm trying to write Japanese poetry friend not sure I'm doing it right. It's about writing with as few words as possible and giving the most possible images & feeling and I believe contrast of ideas. Your verse above could be put in a Tanka. 5 linesslyabbles 5,7,5,7,7 "The moon gazed wanely (5), The stars ripened like melons (7) Immortals whispers (5) charmed the haunted forest (7) with her tale when we two hugged." Your verse is excellent just trying to give you the idea. Light & Love Debbie