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When the Natives Are Restless

(7/5 Trochee rhyme form) They’re coming. Listen closely. Hear that distant thrum. . . that steady thrum- thrum- thrumming of a tom-tom drum. There! Beyond the cornfield rows. Tell me, don’t you see the tops of feathers moving forward stealthily? They’re so close to the house now! Soon they’ll reach the fence. Where have all the cowboys gone? War will soon commence! Wait! I saw the bushes move. Roger with his gun spied a Cherokee and now has him on the run. But appearing on the scene, tomahawks in hand, those Cherokees have attacked just to save their man. Roger’s fallen to the ground. Oh, my son is dead! Indians now are swarming, faces painted red. Running toward the bushes, they give a mighty whoop! Cowboys must come out and fight this most fearsome group. A cowboy wins if he is first one to take aim, but, touched by a tomahawk, he will lose the game. When THE NATIVES ARE RESTLESS it just isn’t cool, and I’m counting off the days till they’re back in school! For The Catch Phrase Contest/ sponsored by Deborah Guzzi (My catch phrase: The natives are restless)

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Date: 5/31/2012 8:46:00 AM
Another poem that shows your diversity, as usual i'm amazed. love youy. harry
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Date: 6/16/2010 7:00:00 AM
Excellent ending with the surprise twist...Keep the creative thinking going and pen flowing..Good luck in the contest..Sara
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Date: 6/12/2010 10:26:00 AM
Amazingly beautiful and wonderfully ended. You have penned this Poem very well my friend. Thanks for your liking of Patradoot. Regarding Vasava I will take it up soon. Al least you will find some more very interesting parts. Love and best wishes....Ravindra....Andrea Dietrich
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Date: 6/11/2010 2:18:00 PM
This is adorable! Completely dramatic and silly. I love it!
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Date: 6/9/2010 10:23:00 AM
I absolutely loved how you ended this! "Till they're back in school". Great rhyme and an excellent entry! A definite winner.
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Date: 6/6/2010 8:54:00 AM
Cute and clever and so true. For me the contests are sometimes good to get creative energy going though results are not always a good match for contest. Thank you for your kind comments, I value them.
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Date: 6/5/2010 11:39:00 PM
Oh I loved this one! My mother was a school teacher and I'm from Oklahoma, so I always loved cowboys and indians. Yahoo!
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Date: 6/5/2010 10:06:00 PM
Wonderful write and u did great with your phrase..now u MUST CAPITALIZE the phrase words in your line of the poem per Debbie.. OK.. go change it ..luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 6/5/2010 8:28:00 PM
hi again Andrea :)--you interpreted that exactly ;) wanted to play into a little bit of irony there...thank you...hmm maybe I'll enter that ;)! just waiting for that ground beef to cook so sneaking in some Soup time hahaha
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Date: 6/5/2010 8:04:00 PM
Very fun write Andrea! Score one for the natives! I really liked your twist here--your first part made me feel like I'm watching a movie :D--btw thanks for your comments on my Sijo--heehee somehow I did like that bee one better ;) let me see I'll post my other 2 up...then gotta go :(
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Date: 6/5/2010 7:40:00 PM
Very cool poem, Andrea! Creative and fun to read with its rhyme and melody. Should do very well in the contest! Love, Carolyn PS -- sent you a regular email
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