Red Fiery Poet Free verse

When Terror Strikes

All along the dead valley
I walked with his gun…
How death could escape..
I gave up this thought
He broke my hope 
With his narrow eyes
My plead was refused
Oh! That inhuman look…..
turned the sky black.... 
What prayers could save 
this world at last
We were the ONE but we carried the gun.... 




Not sure about the title of this poem... Plz suggest?

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Joe Maverick December 29, 2022 at 5:14 PM Hello long time between reads, how are you? After all that has gone down since 2019/20 Just reaching out.'

Joe Maverick December 29, 2022 at 5:14 PM Hello long time between reads, how are you? After all that has gone down since 2019/20 Just reaching out.'

Robert Pettit April 1, 2016 at 10:45 AM Impressive write, and the title you have appears suitable.

Poet Destroyer A March 30, 2016 at 7:04 PM You've expressed yourself well Red, I think the title fits your poem well. A 7 from me to you. Love LINDA

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty March 29, 2016 at 11:40 AM I see conflicting forces interacting ...in favor of life. Love Red.

Richard Lamoureux March 29, 2016 at 7:52 AM Cool piece, I like it! No need to change the title, it's perfect.

Robert Lindley March 28, 2016 at 6:15 PM Title suggestion, "His Death Still Haunts Me". "All along the dead valley I walked with his gun…" ^^^ This grabbed me.. and the rest carried me along fine. A7

Anne-Lise Andresen March 27, 2016 at 6:29 AM - Powerfully poem, Red - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus March 27, 2016 at 4:40 AM This poem is very expressive of mankind's actions, Red! Where we seek happiness and love, others spread hate and fear. But love will not give in to threats, not as long as hope burns in our hearts! hugs // paul