Nette Onclaud Poet Free verse

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When Summer Is Gone Contest sponsored by Jcb Brul. 19 Jul 24 I count this verse as a 19- line offering with accidental tech indentation from my cellphone.

When Summer Is Gone

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Another streak of blazed discovery 
  tumbles upon this month's vanishing ember,
that I gaze at an abandoned coastline 
   washing off this season's tanned mist

with August dimming its flame:

An assemblage of blossoms poses to reveal its paling watercolor tips
   bending like petioles of goodbye,
air- smoked by evening 's approach:

I feel the minutes pass in quick response...
   where a different flavor breathes to
change the raw tempo pervading through
this season's reign, lusty and free--

Another cycle heralds a call, and yet
it cannot be the end of summer...
   my heated fields are still aflame,
   this mouth hungering for passion kisses on nights of fire--
The thrill of a sizzling landscape remains unfinished 

  when rosy summer lingers on my mind...still.

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Sara Kendrick August 5, 2024 at 2:04 PM Congratulations on your winner in this very interesting contest. Way to go. Sara K

Crystol Woods July 27, 2024 at 10:54 AM Wonderfully imagery and metaphor... as always you delight the senses with the language of love. Congrats! Oxox

Paula Goldsmith July 25, 2024 at 1:32 PM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your "When Summer Is Gone" write. Great Ending... Have a wonderful day writing away................

JC Brul July 24, 2024 at 10:50 PM You have a unique way with metaphors. Your ending is killing me softly! Congratulations. A fave for me.

Andrea Dietrich July 19, 2024 at 10:22 PM Oh yes. I love when it lingers .love the lusty and free line, Nette. I am so glad to be a "late summer" baby. And I adore the passionate Indian summers. This should do quite well in the contest I think.

Darlene De Beaulieu July 19, 2024 at 2:36 PM Hello Nette, oh my gosh! I am not thinking of the end of summer. i am just enjoying it. Hugs. /Darlene/ Hugs. I am in no rush for a change of season.

Kim Rodrigues July 19, 2024 at 9:54 AM assemblage of blossoms pose to reveal its paling watercolor tips… and yet it cannot be the end of summer... my heated fields are still aflame…thankfully we are still in Summer’s midst, for the roses to cheer us :) HUGS

Ink Empress July 19, 2024 at 8:21 AM Youv gone for a very passionate and heartfelt theme for this prompt, giving a very sensual vibe too. I love “The thrill of a sizzling landscape remains unfinished when rosy summer lingers on my mind...still.” Ah what an ending! Somethings just remain unfinished when mind refuses to let go… felt this one so strongly! Best wishes

Sara Kendrick July 19, 2024 at 4:15 AM Reads like a good contender for the contest, Nette. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Way to go. I appreciate the visit to my page. Sara K

Mystic Rose Rose July 19, 2024 at 4:08 AM You have always come across to me Nette, as a well seasoned poet, who can write just about anything, even the dictionary and make it sound poetically pleasing to the eye and the heart. How do you do it ? Gl, its a winner by far, !