When Summer is Gone

Contest: When Summer is Gone
Sponsor: Jcb Brul
1st Place.

"Was it the iris in your heart or was it the whale in my soul?
I thought we were meant to be."                       ~ the poet

balmy winds stroke my cheeks 
soft hands and calloused fingertips 
dance their way around my face
tired eyes flutter shut. I feel 

waves of oceans with steady currents
a brilliant sun and lemon sand
key lime moss adorning an unbounded shoreline
reflected in coconut pupils,
they are just for you and just for me

when summer is gone,
your touch will not fade
I am the sculpture you pressed life into
the vacant canvas you dyed mulberry blue
though your breaths might, 
that love will not falter

and to the young girl who fell asleep counting the stars in your tears,
there will 
              always be an us 
                                     always... be
                                                      an us.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 4/27/2025 8:08:00 PM
So utterly beautiful. Love this
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 4/28/2025 12:53:00 AM
Thanks so much, Andrea <3
Date: 3/17/2025 1:12:00 PM
Just beautiful. This poem has some short lines of brevity punch impact that I didn't see in the others I read. Good poems with brevity soar my poetry adrenaline high! Your short lines did that and the imagery impresses. Congrats, Sweetie for having a poem truly deserving of a trophy. Hugs ... CayCay
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 3/18/2025 3:25:00 AM
Thank you so much, CayCay dear. I am so grateful to your kind reviews of my work XOXO
Date: 3/14/2025 6:33:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 3/15/2025 12:24:00 AM
Much appreciated <3
Date: 11/12/2024 11:02:00 AM
Superb stanza showcases the steadfast spirit of love and linkage, lingering despite distance or the drift of days. It features vivid visuals of the wild, treasured tales, and the profound emotional tether between two souls, hinting that their affection surpasses mere physicality and thrives within their thoughts.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 11/12/2024 11:03:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sotto! Be Blessed.
Date: 8/18/2024 4:39:00 AM
"I am the sculpture you pressed life into the vacant canvas you dyed mulberry blue though your breaths might, that love will not falter"... Love these lines. On the whole, such a lovely romantic poem. Though late, Congratulations on your great win.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 8/18/2024 5:03:00 AM
Thank you so much, dear Valsa!!!! God Bless.
Date: 8/14/2024 1:02:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. I loved reading your wonderful summer write. Love your ending. I wish you would write more....  Have a blessed day writing away................
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 8/15/2024 3:34:00 AM
Thank you so much, Paula!!!! I wish I would write more as well but exams get in the way of everything ;( I really appreciate you wanting that though. Much Blessings.
Date: 8/8/2024 2:02:00 PM
Congratulations on your winner in this contest. Way to go. I was delighted to see your name in the list. Sara K
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 8/8/2024 8:15:00 PM
Thank you, Sara. So glad to see you here <3
Date: 8/6/2024 9:20:00 AM
Lemon sand, keylime moss, coconut pupils delightful! Hugs ~ Kim
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 8/6/2024 10:11:00 PM
Thank you, Kim!
Date: 8/3/2024 11:25:00 PM
Beautifully written Hiba. I just love the line "a brilliant sun and lemon sand". The repetition at the end is very effective too. Cheers - Gary
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 8/4/2024 5:31:00 AM
Thank you, Gary <3. at the end, i wanted to convey the feeling of falling asleep. glad you liked it.
Date: 7/24/2024 3:23:00 PM
Absolutely lovely verse, Hiba! Enjoyed this one! :)
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 7/25/2024 3:05:00 AM
I appreciate you, Laura <3
Date: 7/23/2024 8:24:00 AM
Nice romantic poem Hiba
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 7/23/2024 9:17:00 AM
Thank you, David :)
Date: 7/21/2024 5:16:00 AM
enjoyed reading this, some striking imagery and wording such as 'coconut pupils' and 'counting the stars in your tears'..thanks for commenting on my work :)
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 7/21/2024 5:33:00 AM
Thank you so much, Charlotte!
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