When Something Isn'T Right

Have you ever had a nagging feeling that something isn't right ?
Now multiply a hundredfold, this represents my plight
The world laid out before you, on the surface all is well
Non specific swirling darkness, grave forebodings dwell
Try to keep your focus, through long shadows ebbing light
While all along dark spectre creeping, approaching endless night
Not a fear of ghosts and goblins, or monsters under bed
But a feeling deep inside the core, that penetrates the head
Things are not so bad you say, you're better off than many
If it's comfort you are seeking, you're not receiving any
Suffocates your optimism, and all that's good and true
You ask yourself what is this thing, and what it wants from you
Search within you, try to find, your strength and your voice
Looking for the answer as if you had a choice
You want to see its ugly head that you may stand and fight
But as for now, all you know is something isn't right

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 1/30/2015 5:49:00 AM
Wow wonderful poem i love it:)
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Date: 1/21/2014 11:13:00 PM
This is brilliantly written Walter. That nagging feeling - it is especially gruesome when you can't find out what is wrong and yet you have to work to make things right. Very well written!
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Date: 4/16/2013 11:35:00 PM
the shadows loom overhead and you never know where that twist of fate may be lingering ------ nice one Walter
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Date: 2/16/2013 12:06:00 PM
A perfect Halloween poem to give us the chills...A very impressive peace. I felt your unease... Every time something is going well... we know it can't go on forever and something will eventually happen... we can feel it coming...
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Date: 6/12/2012 6:36:00 PM
Very Nice!!!! I love it!!!!!!!
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Date: 5/2/2012 7:02:00 PM
Walter, everything nags inside me.. so I know the feeling.. it just keeps lingering and growing in the inside.. sometimes it is really nothing.. but, the comforting part sounds good. a very optimistic point you have here. never finding what is right when it comes to answers. how right it is to feel wrong.. interesting... .. have yourself a very wonderful day ;-) LINDA
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Walter Williams
Date: 5/3/2012 3:03:00 AM
Thank you so much Linda....Sometimes the mind takes the writing all over the place :)
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