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When I Become You

In stillness moves the blade of grass the heart still beats in the silence of night songbirds greet the days beginning and ending when there are shadows, there are my fears In breath there is life beating still the mouse waits in the night for silence even songbirds are quiet after the light is gone when I face my fears the shadows remain In silence the night hears the heartbeat in being still, I am the songbird and the mouse with the night the grass bends when the owl swoops when I become the shadow there is no fear Brian's contest 1st place

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/10/2020 5:07:00 PM

Beautifully done; so metaphorically sound. Congratulations Jeanne

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/10/2020 5:55:00 PM

Caren, I loved this too. THank you for that comment. It is nice.

Frances Schiavina

Date: 7/10/2020 9:34:00 AM

Congratulations on your beautifully deep well deserved first place win!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/10/2020 1:21:00 PM

Hi frances. thank you for stopping in to read this poem...it's quickly becoming one of my favorites too. Jeanne

Hilo Poet

Date: 7/8/2020 7:10:00 PM

"...when I become the shadow there is no fear", amazingly well-penned, Jeanne, apprehensibly mesmerizing worthy of high honors at winning 1st Place -- Aloha~@William

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/8/2020 9:11:00 PM

Aloha...I love that word and meaning...and place. and thank you for the kind words. all the best to you. Jeanne

John Watt

Date: 7/8/2020 12:45:00 PM

Your title drew me in, and your words held me captive. The depiction of facing your fears using the totems of songbird, mouse, and owl were tantalizing, and have such a universal appeal. Excellent poetry, Jeanne, and worthy of the win. Congrats ~ John

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/8/2020 9:10:00 PM

Thank you John. I'm glad it was not a disappointment once you were lured in for the read! lol. I really do appreciate your words. Jeanne

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/8/2020 12:30:00 PM

This is a masterfully crafted poem, Jeanne. It is filled with rich imagery and depth. Congratulations on your first place! Blessings to you.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 7/9/2020 11:22:00 AM

Hi Jeanne! Will keep your niece in my thoughts and prayers.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/8/2020 9:08:00 PM

Hi Sam. Thanks for the comments. I'm happy with getting to write a bit each day and see where it goes...this has been down inside for awhile as a worry for my niece and wishes for her a good life. I really appreciate your comments.

Brenda Chiri

Date: 7/8/2020 7:46:00 AM

Congrats on your top win!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/8/2020 9:07:00 PM

Hi Brenda, hope you are doing well. Thank you for the comment.

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/8/2020 6:50:00 AM

I love your delightful enchanting muse Jeanne. This one really makes me feel the music of the night blanketing my dreams. Congratulations on your win. Much love :)

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/8/2020 9:06:00 PM

Hello dear Aditi. I love that Brian is having these contests where we can just write what bubbles up inside and see where it goes. Best to you by dear poetess.