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When I Am Not

Don't grieve for me for you see

The me I am is you

The me I was is no more

I'm thoroughly gone it's true

No cold no hot no hunger no thirst

Not stressed not blessed not even cursed

Not here not there not anywhere

Just one with the universe

So smile I was but now I'm not

But when I was I was

And when I was I was with you

And that is quite a lot


27 December 2015

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Lisa Brannon

March 5, 2016 at 10:46 AM

I really enjoyed this poem...reminds is to hold right to what we have and who we love because all too soon it's gone away

Howard Tunick

March 5, 2016 at 2:35 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed it Lisa. You are quite right. Count your blessing and live in the moment.

Lisa Brannon

March 5, 2016 at 10:47 AM

Reminds us to hold tight is what it's supposed to say...darn auto correct

Howard Tunick

January 13, 2016 at 8:47 PM

Thank you again Daniel. Words are really fun.

Daniel Turner

January 13, 2016 at 12:04 PM

Ah, transformation! Great write Howard.

Barbara Gorelick

January 11, 2016 at 5:03 PM

This is great! A few commas might make is read a little easier....Its very good anyway. BG

Howard Tunick

January 12, 2016 at 9:14 PM

Thanks Barbara. The three lines starting "No cold... Not stressed... Not here...." I read each of those lines very fast as if each of the word/conditions expressed in each line was one. Followed by "Just one with the universe" read slowly. I thought commas would cause a pause between each "condition" changing the rhythm I was trying for. I would appreciate feed back on that. I am very new at this. All constructive criticism is greatly appreciated. So most sincerely thank you. H