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I said… In time, when my hair has gone wispy and grey When my youth like my hairline has scampered away When my joints creak aloud any time that I move When my musical taste isn’t quite in groove Will you tolerate me whilst I idolise you Will you still be my soulmate when these things are true And then I said… In time, when my tummy casts shade on my feet When my teeth as a set are no longer complete When I enter a room and I don’t recall why When I can’t hear the TV unless it’s up high When these things happen, when these things are true Will you still want me… please answer me do And she said… Remember we stood with the rings we would give We promised each other, “So long as we live” How many times did our dotage occur to us Well, it seems that in your case, the ‘When’ is superfluous

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Date: 2/18/2025 12:37:00 AM
She loves you as you are and wants to be around and the fact that 'well, it seems that in your case, the when is superfluous' is said, reinforces her answer to you and how hilariously you describe yourself! Awesome write Terry. hugs,blessings, Jennifer.
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Terry Flood
Date: 2/20/2025 4:24:00 PM
Yikes! I should point out that that version of me was entirely for creative effect. I haven’t looked THAT good in years!
Date: 2/9/2025 11:12:00 AM
- "In time, when my tummy casts shade on my feet" ... :))) - She loves it just the way you are, Terry :) - hugs
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Terry Flood
Date: 2/11/2025 4:34:00 PM
Thanks, Anne-Lise. No shade on my feet… YET ;-)
Date: 2/9/2025 11:08:00 AM
Your lines begin in all sincerity, but in true "Terry fashion," you turn the tide and bring a smile to my face... LOL Terry, I love tummy shadow at your feet. So now, you're putting words in your spouse's mouth! Your poetry is never superfluous. I can't get enough.
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Terry Flood
Date: 2/11/2025 4:37:00 PM
Getting my tummy down now after Christmas. Had about a stone (14 pounds) to lose and nine of them are gone. Seems to have taken longer than usual…. Must be an age thing ;-) Glad you enjoyed.
Date: 2/9/2025 11:01:00 AM
Ugh! I hate wispy hair
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Terry Flood
Date: 2/9/2025 11:03:00 AM
I’m very glad to say that this is not autobiographical, Tom ;-)

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