What Lurks Within

Its dark in here, there’s a scuttling noise, there is something I see
The dinosaur of the modern age, silverfish are crawling free.

There is a dripping sound; I smell an old wet rag
In fact the smell is awful, it even makes me gag.

I am keeping very still; there is a light in the big room
I see through this crack, even though I am in the gloom.

I turn around slowly; I wish I’d stayed outside
But the smell of food enticed me, then I find I could have died.

Sitting on the wire, a huge chunk of moldy cheese
But still in did entice me, my hunger it may appease.

It was the memory of my little wife that stopped me just in time
When she stepped onto that trap she thought it was a meal sublime.

But I remembered just in time, and now I turn my back
I am waiting for the light to go, then I will start to back track.

No more in this cupboard, will I lurk within
I may find a better mouse dinner, going through the rubbish bin…

© 22/03/2013 ~GG~
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Dietrich Avatar
April 8, 2013 at 5:33 PM
THis is SO cute , Mandy. Glad to finally see it. I like the light way you took the challenge and made this adorable mouse tale!!
Horsman Avatar
April 8, 2013 at 10:53 AM
excellent winner Mandy, and truly deserved...
Konos Avatar
April 8, 2013 at 9:37 AM
Indeed a Golden Poem...thanks...
Gasun Avatar
April 8, 2013 at 8:06 AM
This is indeed a great write my dearest friend Mandy! My hearty congratulations on your super win and amazing write! Have a great weekend! love lots, Leonora
Dillard Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 8:42 PM
Enjoyed your mouse tale! Congratulations! RAY
Sister Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 8:36 PM
So cute little mouse, I hate them so. They steal the stuffing out of pillows and quilts, invade drawers. And smell. But, I had a pet one once. J
Guzzi Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 7:00 PM
congrad's on your win. Light & Love
A   Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 6:11 PM
Mandy~ Congratulations in Seren's "what lurks within" contest. Always~ LINDA
Lamoureux Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 5:46 PM
Delightful! Congratulations.
Roberts Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 5:19 PM
well done Mandy, like the punch line ...Seren
Horsman Avatar
March 24, 2013 at 5:44 PM
again wonderful story telling, one lucky little mouse, living there,,,
Falotico Avatar
March 23, 2013 at 5:36 AM
You are a great story teller!!! Loved it... and thank you for your sweet blog comment to me...xxxx Michael
Konos Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 10:04 PM
Thanks, I enjoyed...Good luck in the contest.....
Manassian Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 9:41 AM
WOW! Good one, Mandy! Dad once caught a little mouse that was so adorable...I made him take it out to the wooded area and set it free! This was a fantastic tail!!! ;)
Dom Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 7:28 AM
A mousy tail. Nice.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 9:11 AM
Thanks Michael xx
Jones Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 7:11 AM
Wow Mandy...I was all set for a horror story....great job...Donna.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 9:11 AM
Thanks again Donna xx
Sivey Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 5:31 AM
I had no idea this was about a little mouse until the sixth stanza, so very nicely written my friend! I really enjoyed reading this cleverly written poem this morning! What a delightful piece, wondrously put together Mandy! Great Work!!
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
March 22, 2013 at 5:35 AM
Good, I kept it secret until then , thanks Russell xx
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