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June.26 2023

What Happened to Jordan

Sponsor- Miranda Hawley

In the wee hours of a cool autumn night, They were roused from sleep by a loud knock. They feared it would be some bandits, Trying to get into the house pulling open the lock. To their great surprise they found their own Jordan, Who had been mysteriously missing since years. No news of him to the deep chagrin of his dear ones, Leaving all in great suspense and his parents, in tears As a child he had been a stinker, no church, and no God. Used to absent from class for many days, a truant. He longed for freedom and didn’t like being confined. He was lured by adventure and was never prudent. Seeing him, his parents were so excited, but he was full of remorse. He asked forgiveness for he had sinned against all and gone astray. He was in a UFO wishing to soar away into the clouds. Now he is a changed man who has stepped out of his zombie way. * * * * On the pulse of a new life, he now has the grace to look up, Into the faces of his brethren, read their mind and their problem, With a resolve to do whatever he can to ameliorate their pain, He renders selfless service, helping many lives blossom!

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Date: 7/23/2023 1:38:00 AM
Sometimes you need to search on the outside to find what's in the inside.
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Date: 7/16/2023 6:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in my contest.
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Valsa George
Date: 7/16/2023 9:54:00 PM
Thanks a lot Miranda for the opportunity given to take part in your contest !
Date: 6/28/2023 11:25:00 AM
This is a wonderful poem of redemption Valsa, how incredibly wonderful! The prodigal son returns, a changed man. This is such an uplifting poem!
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Date: 6/27/2023 5:55:00 AM
A beautiful story. Pray for my daughter’s in-law who showed up at the parents’s door but is still not changed. Far and few between are the resurrected prodigals. I pray an awakening..that they will find freedom in Jesus and indeed render selfless service. God bless you, sweet Valsa!
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Date: 6/26/2023 7:29:00 PM
The saddest of all stories is when.... A Vampire comes home. I'm just sorry.
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Date: 6/26/2023 3:55:00 PM
I love it, Valsa, what a great tale in poetic form. Great entry for the contest, my dear friend. good luck. Very creative and I like the lost and found elements of the poem. Just enough possibility to hold our interest and make us wonder. :-) A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 6/26/2023 3:50:00 PM
Dear Valsa, I couldn't tell if this was a true story, fiction, or perhaps a little bit of both? In any event, a very intriguing and philosophical tale indeed. Bravo ~ Terrell
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Date: 6/26/2023 9:51:00 AM
Dear Valsa, what a grand return of a lost sheep. Excellent in many ways.
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Date: 6/26/2023 9:14:00 AM
“My people have been lost sheep; their shepherds have led them astray and caused them to roam on the mountains. They wandered over mountain and hill and forgot their own resting place. Jeremiah 50:6 NIV Love your poem, there is always prayers, hope, and love for all to come to know God
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Stephan McBride
Date: 6/26/2023 9:16:00 AM
“Suppose one of you has a hundred sheep and loses one of them. Doesn’t he leave the ninety-nine in the open country and go after the lost sheep until he finds it? And when he finds it, he joyfully puts it on his shoulders and goes home. Then he calls his friends and neighbors together and says, ‘Rejoice with me; I have found my lost sheep.’ Luke 15:4?-?6 NIV
Date: 6/26/2023 6:40:00 AM
I am sure he had a thrilling ride into an adventure. Very imaginative story, Valsa. Best to you.
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Date: 6/26/2023 6:20:00 AM
Valsa, your incredible imagination is truly rewarding, and your captivating tale of Jordan exudes a wealth of intriguing ideas and profound insights. Good luck with the contest.
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