Weeping Willow

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Written: January 03, 2024
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Wrenching writhing
of capacious weeping willows
In a dubious dream vault
I felt spurred to seek safety
from scorching sun
subsequently, in confusion,
I broke into a wide smile
that reverberated within
an inane, jumbled heartbeat,
venous thrombosis.

Imbue a pulse to svelte vessels
I didn't realize when it started
lacking friends and love
shattered heart, rotting core
halcyon recalls vanished
just dying is the goal
It's exhausting to suffer and cry.
 
Every sound in your name
whispered in the breeze
strengthened our bond
going toward dreams
amid fluttering twigs
I discovered serenity and solace
weeping willow's embrace
wind rustled its twigs as music
quiet fears of long-lost hopes
seeking refuge from the hot sun
I discovered this secret treasure
a vault for memories and dreams
It's a long way to hell alone
life isn't awful, but no one phones
I can stay here until earth scorns
stay with my weeping willow.

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Bill Baker

Date: 1/4/2024 4:12:00 PM

Ah to solace of the weeping willow. A great place to feel the survival of one's soul. Beautiful imagery and so many great lines, my friend. "It's exhausting to suffer and cry", resonates with the pain in my heart at times. It is beyond my understanding, yet I freely accepted that which comes to me and my life daily. A FAV for my list, Sotto Poet. Well done! Have a pleasant evening, my friend. Bill

Silent One

Date: 1/4/2024 11:31:00 AM

Your your poem is a beautifully crafted exploration of emotional turmoil, solitude, and the redemptive power of nature. The use of vivid imagery and poignant language makes it a compelling and thought-provoking piece... Loved it..

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/4/2024 8:55:00 AM

Imagery and picturesque adorn this poem. I love weeping willows.

Ink Empress

Date: 1/4/2024 8:47:00 AM

This is brilliant dr sotto, you have a way with words, and your wordplay shows you are a physician too, i guess, so clever how you weave words in such a creative manner: theres so many lines that stood out for me. But especially the descriptive nature of your lines as well as how evocative the ending is, really did hit strong “ Every sound in your name whispered in the breeze strengthened our bond going toward dreams amid fluttering twigs“ thats deep and so unique use of diction! Felt this. FAVE

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/4/2024 6:03:00 AM

A superb blend of emotions and imagery, my friend: I discovered serenity and solace weeping willow's embrace wind rustled its twigs as music quiet fears of long-lost hopes-- WOW! write On!!