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coloured flecks on the front door- peeling away of memories... love’s dilapidation - - - - - - - - - - - - Writing Challenge 3, August 2019- Five Lines- Poetry Contest Hosted by Dear Heart - Wiishkobi Ode Placed 3rd Posted 23rd August 2019

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Date: 11/29/2020 6:31:00 PM
A wonderful write, Paul. I love the imagery of this :)
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Date: 12/1/2020 5:42:00 AM
Thank you, Angela. Have a nice day. // paul
Date: 11/13/2019 5:33:00 AM
An excellent write Paul. Love the imagery and the metaphor :-) x
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Date: 11/14/2019 4:51:00 PM
Thank you, Elaine...and I love your lovely comments:) Regards // paul
Date: 9/27/2019 9:10:00 AM
love this clever write, my friend
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Date: 10/7/2019 4:50:00 PM
Oh dear...this one sure managed to escape my attention, Jack!! Thank you for reading and liking, my friend. Best regards // paul
Date: 9/6/2019 8:20:00 AM
Congrats on your podium win Paul. I love this description of love's decline.
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Date: 9/7/2019 3:08:00 AM
Thank you, Jeanne. Have a nice day. Regards // paul
Date: 9/5/2019 9:14:00 AM
A combination of lovely imagery and metaphors in this piece, a pleasure to read, Paul!
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Date: 9/5/2019 10:14:00 AM
I'm pleased it appealed to you, Michael. Welcome back to Soup. Regards // paul
Date: 8/31/2019 10:13:00 PM
Paul, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this creative Tanka, love the reference to the peeling door~
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Date: 9/1/2019 5:11:00 AM
Thank you, Constance. Keep on prompting our hungry muse:) Best regards // paul
Date: 8/29/2019 3:57:00 AM
- Amazing ... your short lines says a lot, Paul - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/29/2019 4:26:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise....I love your comments;) Hugs // paul
Date: 8/26/2019 1:47:00 PM
Sometimes people mark the heights of their children on doors. Would be sad to see so much of it peeling away. Excellent metaphor, Paul! Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn
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Date: 8/26/2019 4:44:00 PM
Thank you for your lovely comments, Carolyn. Incidentally I still have markings on the side of the door leading to the kitchen; can't bring myself to paint over it! Hugs // paul
Date: 8/26/2019 8:51:00 AM
I hope you also have a nice day Paul. Thanks for your visit.
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Date: 8/26/2019 4:29:00 PM
:)
Date: 8/26/2019 7:31:00 AM
Amazing Paul! I love reading your works!;)
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Date: 8/26/2019 4:36:00 PM
Many thanks, Brenda; I can assure you that it works both ways:) Warm regards // paul
Date: 8/25/2019 10:53:00 AM
In five lines you render a whole story, vision and life! Five lines of eloquent words and splendid imagery! A challenging work of Art worthy of honourable placement! Always a great delight to read your creative poetry, Paul.. My deepest regards and blessings.
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Date: 8/26/2019 6:12:00 PM
Thank you for your generous insightful comments, Besma. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. Warm regards and blessings // paul
Date: 8/24/2019 3:35:00 PM
Depth and insight in this one is great my friend. Sad reality is that as most of us age we face the curse of declining health. And also may have face other woes as well. Powerfully expressed five lines! A fav,..
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Date: 8/25/2019 3:06:00 AM
Thank you, Robert. Many are those who speak of the benefits of old age, yet sad reality as you describe it cannot be swept under the carpet. Take care, my friend. Regards // paul
Date: 8/24/2019 8:00:00 AM
I enjoyed the texture of this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/25/2019 3:03:00 AM
Thank you for reading and commenting, Richard. Have a nice day. Regards // paul
Date: 8/24/2019 6:46:00 AM
This is a great use of metaphor... very deep..
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Date: 8/25/2019 2:55:00 AM
Thank you, S1. Regards // paul
Date: 8/23/2019 4:24:00 PM
Time takes its toll on everything and everyone..you said it well..all the best, Paul.
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Date: 8/24/2019 3:25:00 PM
Thank you, Vijay. All the best to you, too. // paul
Date: 8/23/2019 2:31:00 PM
Aww Paul such an emotional write beautiful and sad imagery, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/23/2019 2:46:00 PM
So pleased you liked it, Jan...thank you. This was meant to be a tanka, but played it safe. Hugs // paul
Date: 8/23/2019 2:02:00 PM
Beautiful in its heart-rending expression of love!
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Date: 8/23/2019 2:23:00 PM
Thank you, Gabby. Best regards // paul
Date: 8/23/2019 1:20:00 PM
Fantastic piece Paul! A winner in my books, good luck in the contest :) xomo
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Date: 8/23/2019 2:12:00 PM
My first commenting visitor! Thank you for being so quick on the draw, Maureen:) Your complimentary comments are truly appreciated. Warm regards // paul

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