Paul Callus Poet Tanka

Wear and Tear

coloured flecks
on the front door-
peeling away
of memories...
love’s dilapidation

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Writing Challenge 3, August 2019- Five Lines- Poetry Contest
Hosted by Dear Heart - Wiishkobi Ode
Placed 3rd
Posted 23rd August 2019

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Angela Crabtree November 29, 2020 at 6:31 PM A wonderful write, Paul. I love the imagery of this :) Paul Callus December 1, 2020 at 5:42 AM Thank you, Angela. Have a nice day. // paul

Elaine Perrin November 13, 2019 at 5:33 AM An excellent write Paul. Love the imagery and the metaphor :-) x Paul Callus November 14, 2019 at 4:51 PM Thank you, Elaine...and I love your lovely comments:) Regards // paul

Jack Horne September 27, 2019 at 9:10 AM love this clever write, my friend Paul Callus October 7, 2019 at 4:50 PM Oh dear...this one sure managed to escape my attention, Jack!! Thank you for reading and liking, my friend. Best regards // paul

Jeanne Mcgee September 6, 2019 at 8:20 AM Congrats on your podium win Paul. I love this description of love's decline. Paul Callus September 7, 2019 at 3:08 AM Thank you, Jeanne. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Michael Whatley September 5, 2019 at 9:14 AM A combination of lovely imagery and metaphors in this piece, a pleasure to read, Paul! Paul Callus September 5, 2019 at 10:14 AM I'm pleased it appealed to you, Michael. Welcome back to Soup. Regards // paul

Constance La France August 31, 2019 at 10:13 PM Paul, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this creative Tanka, love the reference to the peeling door~ Paul Callus September 1, 2019 at 5:11 AM Thank you, Constance. Keep on prompting our hungry muse:) Best regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen August 29, 2019 at 3:57 AM - Amazing ... your short lines says a lot, Paul - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus August 29, 2019 at 4:26 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise....I love your comments;) Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire August 26, 2019 at 1:47 PM Sometimes people mark the heights of their children on doors. Would be sad to see so much of it peeling away. Excellent metaphor, Paul! Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn Paul Callus August 26, 2019 at 4:44 PM Thank you for your lovely comments, Carolyn. Incidentally I still have markings on the side of the door leading to the kitchen; can't bring myself to paint over it! Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux August 26, 2019 at 8:51 AM I hope you also have a nice day Paul. Thanks for your visit. Paul Callus August 26, 2019 at 4:29 PM :)

Brenda Chiri August 26, 2019 at 7:31 AM Amazing Paul! I love reading your works!;) Paul Callus August 26, 2019 at 4:36 PM Many thanks, Brenda; I can assure you that it works both ways:) Warm regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri August 25, 2019 at 10:53 AM In five lines you render a whole story, vision and life! Five lines of eloquent words and splendid imagery! A challenging work of Art worthy of honourable placement! Always a great delight to read your creative poetry, Paul.. My deepest regards and blessings. Paul Callus August 26, 2019 at 6:12 PM Thank you for your generous insightful comments, Besma. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. Warm regards and blessings // paul

Robert Lindley August 24, 2019 at 3:35 PM Depth and insight in this one is great my friend. Sad reality is that as most of us age we face the curse of declining health. And also may have face other woes as well. Powerfully expressed five lines! A fav,.. Paul Callus August 25, 2019 at 3:06 AM Thank you, Robert. Many are those who speak of the benefits of old age, yet sad reality as you describe it cannot be swept under the carpet. Take care, my friend. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux August 24, 2019 at 8:00 AM I enjoyed the texture of this piece. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus August 25, 2019 at 3:03 AM Thank you for reading and commenting, Richard. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Silent One August 24, 2019 at 6:46 AM This is a great use of metaphor... very deep.. Paul Callus August 25, 2019 at 2:55 AM Thank you, S1. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit August 23, 2019 at 4:24 PM Time takes its toll on everything and everyone..you said it well..all the best, Paul. Paul Callus August 24, 2019 at 3:25 PM Thank you, Vijay. All the best to you, too. // paul

Jan Allison August 23, 2019 at 2:31 PM Aww Paul such an emotional write beautiful and sad imagery, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus August 23, 2019 at 2:46 PM So pleased you liked it, Jan...thank you. This was meant to be a tanka, but played it safe. Hugs // paul

Gabby Sabre August 23, 2019 at 2:02 PM Beautiful in its heart-rending expression of love! Paul Callus August 23, 2019 at 2:23 PM Thank you, Gabby. Best regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 23, 2019 at 1:20 PM Fantastic piece Paul! A winner in my books, good luck in the contest :) xomo Paul Callus August 23, 2019 at 2:12 PM My first commenting visitor! Thank you for being so quick on the draw, Maureen:) Your complimentary comments are truly appreciated. Warm regards // paul