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Wear and Tear

coloured flecks
on the front door-
peeling away
of memories...
love’s dilapidation

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Writing Challenge 3, August 2019- Five Lines- Poetry Contest
Hosted by Dear Heart - Wiishkobi Ode
Placed 3rd
Posted 23rd August 2019

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2019

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Angela Crabtree Date: 11/29/2020 6:31:00 PM A wonderful write, Paul. I love the imagery of this :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 12/1/2020 5:42:00 AM Thank you, Angela. Have a nice day. // paul

Elaine Perrin Date: 11/13/2019 5:33:00 AM An excellent write Paul. Love the imagery and the metaphor :-) x Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 11/14/2019 4:51:00 PM Thank you, Elaine...and I love your lovely comments:) Regards // paul

Jack Horne Date: 9/27/2019 9:10:00 AM love this clever write, my friend Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/7/2019 4:50:00 PM Oh dear...this one sure managed to escape my attention, Jack!! Thank you for reading and liking, my friend. Best regards // paul

Jeanne Mcgee Date: 9/6/2019 8:20:00 AM Congrats on your podium win Paul. I love this description of love's decline. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/7/2019 3:08:00 AM Thank you, Jeanne. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Michael Whatley Date: 9/5/2019 9:14:00 AM A combination of lovely imagery and metaphors in this piece, a pleasure to read, Paul! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/5/2019 10:14:00 AM I'm pleased it appealed to you, Michael. Welcome back to Soup. Regards // paul

Constance La France Date: 8/31/2019 10:13:00 PM Paul, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this creative Tanka, love the reference to the peeling door~ Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/1/2019 5:11:00 AM Thank you, Constance. Keep on prompting our hungry muse:) Best regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 8/29/2019 3:57:00 AM - Amazing ... your short lines says a lot, Paul - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/29/2019 4:26:00 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise....I love your comments;) Hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 8/26/2019 1:47:00 PM Sometimes people mark the heights of their children on doors. Would be sad to see so much of it peeling away. Excellent metaphor, Paul! Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/26/2019 4:44:00 PM Thank you for your lovely comments, Carolyn. Incidentally I still have markings on the side of the door leading to the kitchen; can't bring myself to paint over it! Hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/26/2019 8:51:00 AM I hope you also have a nice day Paul. Thanks for your visit. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/26/2019 4:29:00 PM :)

Brenda Chiri Date: 8/26/2019 7:31:00 AM Amazing Paul! I love reading your works!;) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/26/2019 4:36:00 PM Many thanks, Brenda; I can assure you that it works both ways:) Warm regards // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri Date: 8/25/2019 10:53:00 AM In five lines you render a whole story, vision and life! Five lines of eloquent words and splendid imagery! A challenging work of Art worthy of honourable placement! Always a great delight to read your creative poetry, Paul.. My deepest regards and blessings. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/26/2019 6:12:00 PM Thank you for your generous insightful comments, Besma. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. Warm regards and blessings // paul

Robert Lindley Date: 8/24/2019 3:35:00 PM Depth and insight in this one is great my friend. Sad reality is that as most of us age we face the curse of declining health. And also may have face other woes as well. Powerfully expressed five lines! A fav,.. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/25/2019 3:06:00 AM Thank you, Robert. Many are those who speak of the benefits of old age, yet sad reality as you describe it cannot be swept under the carpet. Take care, my friend. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/24/2019 8:00:00 AM I enjoyed the texture of this piece. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/25/2019 3:03:00 AM Thank you for reading and commenting, Richard. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Silent One Date: 8/24/2019 6:46:00 AM This is a great use of metaphor... very deep.. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/25/2019 2:55:00 AM Thank you, S1. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit Date: 8/23/2019 4:24:00 PM Time takes its toll on everything and everyone..you said it well..all the best, Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/24/2019 3:25:00 PM Thank you, Vijay. All the best to you, too. // paul

Jan Allison Date: 8/23/2019 2:31:00 PM Aww Paul such an emotional write beautiful and sad imagery, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2019 2:46:00 PM So pleased you liked it, Jan...thank you. This was meant to be a tanka, but played it safe. Hugs // paul

Gabby Sabre Date: 8/23/2019 2:02:00 PM Beautiful in its heart-rending expression of love! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2019 2:23:00 PM Thank you, Gabby. Best regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 8/23/2019 1:20:00 PM Fantastic piece Paul! A winner in my books, good luck in the contest :) xomo Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 8/23/2019 2:12:00 PM My first commenting visitor! Thank you for being so quick on the draw, Maureen:) Your complimentary comments are truly appreciated. Warm regards // paul