Andrea Dietrich Poet Lay

We Sail Away - Lei

We sail away beneath the sun -
vows made. Our journey’s now begun.
We glide till twilight’s tangerine
drips into ocean’s azure-green.
To shore we’re led by June’s light breeze.
You give my hand a little squeeze.
We wait for time most opportune
for honey underneath the moon!

Jan. 5, 2019
for the Lay It On Me - 8X8 Poetry Contest of charles messina
rhyme pattern: aabbccdd

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Eve Roper January 16, 2020 at 10:32 PM Back with congratulations your win. Eve

Charles Messina January 16, 2020 at 8:09 AM So romantic, Andrea. Very well written and well done! Congratulations on your win! Hugs Charlie

Curtis Moorman January 16, 2020 at 7:29 AM Andrea, I am honored to share a win with you. You made the poem truly exciting with the last two lines -- especially the last line! Congrats on your win!

Carolyn Devonshire January 6, 2020 at 2:39 PM LOVE your romantic poem, Andrea, especially the last line's play of words on honeymoon. Best wishes in the contest, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn

Darlene De Beaulieu January 6, 2020 at 2:02 PM Hello Andrea, I like this poem you have created. Have a nice day my friend.

Constance La France January 5, 2020 at 11:20 PM Andrea, your poem is truly lovely, wonderful writing and well done, best of luck in the contest _ Constance

Connie Marcum Wong January 5, 2020 at 11:00 PM Excellent Andrea! I love the romantic imagery. xxoo

Caren Krutsinger January 5, 2020 at 9:47 PM I like the way this reeks of a romantic honeymoon Andrea.

Sandra Adams January 5, 2020 at 8:37 PM you have always been so great at penning beautiful romantic stories in your poetry... adore this :) hugs

John Watt January 5, 2020 at 6:59 PM Love your little honey/moon serenade, Andrea! Romantic, poetic, descriptive, perfect cadence, short and sweet... it's a winner to me. Hugs ~ John

Quoth Theraven January 5, 2020 at 6:47 PM Andrea, Enchanting Lay in your poem 'We Sail Away'. -Richard

Joseph May January 5, 2020 at 5:58 PM I like 'twilight's tangerine', Wonderful write Andrea..best wishes

Vijay Pandit January 5, 2020 at 3:48 PM Enjoyed the sweet romantic tone--beautifully done, Andrea.

Ilene Bauer January 5, 2020 at 3:42 PM such beautiful rhyming, andrea! lovely!

Line Gauthier January 5, 2020 at 3:34 PM Very sweet, Andrea.

Rico Leffanta January 5, 2020 at 3:29 PM Thank goodness you were not on the same sea as Trump! Aloha! Rico

Juliet Ligon January 5, 2020 at 3:28 PM Beautiful romance, Andrea.

Eve Roper January 5, 2020 at 2:56 PM Reading yours I know I did my wrong .. good luck in the contest. Eve Roper January 5, 2020 at 7:00 PM thank you for reading my poem I do appreciate it. You tell more of a story and I think that is the way the form is suppose to be and all together. I split them because I thought it sounded better.