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Waterfall Wishes On Stars With No Swings

Waterfall wishes on stars with no swings What was I thinking with thirty two lines I guess it was late and I needed some sleep Spent all that time coming up with the rhymes Only to find it was too long to keep Still I recall a few words that I penned Maybe I’ll use them in stanzas below Channeling thoughts that my mind seems to send I’ll use the next verse, let’s give it a go Waterfall wishes on stars with no swings Playground encounters that call to the sky Comets on seesaws with glittery things Moon beams and Ferris Wheels passing us by Pretty much nonsense, I hadn’t a plan Just looked inside at the things I might think So I could write this for someone named Dan Pouring it out in my chaotic ink
Written for the “What was I thinking” poetry contest Sponsored by Daniel Turner 16 lines max : ) Thanks San.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 12/20/2016 4:58:00 AM
I know it went not exactly as it should be, but honestly, if it had, this would have been my personal favourite.
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Darren White
Date: 12/20/2016 9:05:00 AM
If you get rid of the embarrassment (which is not necessary but I get it), could we please enjoy reading that longer and much better version? I would love to :)
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Chris Green
Date: 12/20/2016 8:07:00 AM
Thanks Darren, my original version was much better but it was way too long. :)
Date: 12/19/2016 5:25:00 PM
I would have enjoyed reading your first version too Chris. Maybe after the contest is over you can post your original version? You have great rhyme in this piece. I am enjoying reading the entries for this contest which are all so diverse. : )
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Chris Green
Date: 12/19/2016 5:30:00 PM
Thanks so much Connie. I still have it and maybe after the contest and after the embarrassment of posting a 32 line poem for a 16 line contest wears off, I will. :) I appreciate your kind thoughts.
Date: 12/16/2016 8:40:00 AM
Wonderful poem Chris, good luck :)
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Chris Green
Date: 12/16/2016 9:50:00 AM
Thanks so much Gary.
Date: 12/16/2016 6:25:00 AM
Chris, Chris, Chris, what were you thinking? Oh yeah. :) Figures Danny would inspire such nonsensical chaos. Enjoyed!
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Chris Green
Date: 12/16/2016 8:07:00 AM
Thanks so very much Paloma.
Date: 12/15/2016 10:51:00 PM
Ha! Bravo, Chris - all things of the moment!
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Chris Green
Date: 12/16/2016 8:06:00 AM
Thanks so much Doug.
Date: 12/15/2016 4:28:00 PM
i like the ferris wheel on your mind--goes with the theme.. fine take, chris and huggs
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Chris Green
Date: 12/15/2016 4:51:00 PM
Thank you Nette for your always kind words. I am happy you enjoyed this one
Date: 12/15/2016 2:45:00 PM
Oh, this is so lovely, and what Tim says, that 3d stanza is gorgeous! Those are a few of my favourite things :)
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Chris Green
Date: 12/15/2016 2:57:00 PM
Thanks so much Darren. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 12/15/2016 2:33:00 PM
That third stanza is divine.
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Chris Green
Date: 12/15/2016 2:56:00 PM
Thanks so much Tim.
Date: 12/15/2016 2:23:00 PM
WoW! Chris, this is good too! I enjoyed your take on the contest theme. It was such a fun piece.I think Daniel will like it as well. Nice rhythm and rhymes. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis
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Chris Green
Date: 12/15/2016 2:56:00 PM
Thank goodness for second chances. :) Thanks so very much my sweet friend. I am so happy you liked this.
Date: 12/15/2016 2:20:00 PM
Very nice, Chris! Love how you matched up comets and moon beams!
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Chris Green
Date: 12/15/2016 2:55:00 PM
Thanks so very much Kim.

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